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There are numerous movies in Korea, and the most memoralble movie is \'send to you\' which was introduced us in 2003.
My best friend informed me the movie when I was a university student. Its type is romantic comedy even though it contains sad contents. Its story is that a women who prepared wedding was died suddenly by car accident, after that a men remained missed her. It looks typical love story, but the actors played as real, so it made me sad more than other movies in Korea.
Some people argue that crying when watching sad movie is common for everyone except men. Becuase they think mens look much more stronger than womens even though they actually are weak. According to the article, many Korean male endure not only sad emotion but also tears when they dating with girlfriend in the theater.
In my opinion, changing the concept maden by prejudiced people can help to improve men\'s emotional abilities. It is essential since many companies require sympathy to employee.
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Hello Kelly! I think you can do better dear. ^_^ I looks like you\'ve rushed your answer for this question. You can do it!
~Teacher Irene~
There are numerous movies in Korea, and the most memoralble movie is \'send to you\' which was introduced us in 2003.
>>> Indeed, there are numerous good Korean movies but the most memorable is \'Send to you\' which was filmed in 2003.
My best friend informed me the movie when I was a university student.
>>> My best friend told me about the movie when where were university students.
Its type is romantic comedy even though it contains sad contents.
>>> It was a romantic-comedy film with a few sad scenes.
Its story is that a women who prepared wedding was died suddenly by car accident, after that a men remained missed her.
>>> It\'s a story about a bride who died in a car accident on her way to her wedding. The groom was left behind feeling sad and was missing her.
It looks typical love story, but the actors played as real, so it made me sad more than other movies in Korea.
>>> It was actually a typical love story but the actors were really good. So much so that it made me feel sad as compared to other Korean movies.
Some people argue that crying when watching sad movie is common for everyone except men.
>>> Some people claim that crying after watching a sad movie is quite normal except for men.
Becuase they think mens look much more stronger than womens even though they actually are weak.
>>> Because they think men are emotionally stronger than women though they are actually weak.
According to the article, many Korean male endure not only sad emotion but also tears when they dating with girlfriend in the theater.
>>> According to an article, many men control their sad emotions as well as their tears when watching a sad movie.
In my opinion, changing the concept maden by prejudiced people can help to improve men\'s emotional abilities.
>>> In my opinion, we should change this concept made by prejudiced people to help men become better humans.
It is essential since many companies require sympathy to employee.
>>> It is essential since many companies require workers who can get along well with others.
~Teacher Irene~
There are numerous movies in Korea, and the most memoralble movie is \'send to you\' which was introduced us in 2003.
>>> Indeed, there are numerous good Korean movies but the most memorable is \'Send to you\' which was filmed in 2003.
My best friend informed me the movie when I was a university student.
>>> My best friend told me about the movie when where were university students.
Its type is romantic comedy even though it contains sad contents.
>>> It was a romantic-comedy film with a few sad scenes.
Its story is that a women who prepared wedding was died suddenly by car accident, after that a men remained missed her.
>>> It\'s a story about a bride who died in a car accident on her way to her wedding. The groom was left behind feeling sad and was missing her.
It looks typical love story, but the actors played as real, so it made me sad more than other movies in Korea.
>>> It was actually a typical love story but the actors were really good. So much so that it made me feel sad as compared to other Korean movies.
Some people argue that crying when watching sad movie is common for everyone except men.
>>> Some people claim that crying after watching a sad movie is quite normal except for men.
Becuase they think mens look much more stronger than womens even though they actually are weak.
>>> Because they think men are emotionally stronger than women though they are actually weak.
According to the article, many Korean male endure not only sad emotion but also tears when they dating with girlfriend in the theater.
>>> According to an article, many men control their sad emotions as well as their tears when watching a sad movie.
In my opinion, changing the concept maden by prejudiced people can help to improve men\'s emotional abilities.
>>> In my opinion, we should change this concept made by prejudiced people to help men become better humans.
It is essential since many companies require sympathy to employee.
>>> It is essential since many companies require workers who can get along well with others.
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