essay 9
학생이 쓴 원문
When people go to abroad, we get to know about our tendency cleary. To some, It is fantastic adventure that experience exotic cultures. But to others, they have some trouble with strange customs and try to keep their own way. I am definetely the former type. I'm always curious about foreign cultures. So, trip abroad is a precious chance to fullfil my curiosity and I tried to experience their traditional ways as much as possible.
I went London for 10 days on this July. During my journey, I tried to eat various english foods. Some dishes felt greasy but mostly it was good so I didn't eat the instant rice packed from korea. It was Interesting that London people prefered to eating outside. At lunch time, people ate in everywhere - on the road, in the front of church and at the riverside even pegions were gathering. It seems like a little bit unsanotary or unrefined, but I bought a sandwich and ate like them. And I felt completely assimilate with this city
강사 첨삭
Going to another country is really intriguing.
There are a lot of rules we never knew exist.
However, it depends on our being discreet^^
Have a great day, Veronica, see you!
When people go to abroad, we get to know about our tendency cleary.
>>When people go abroad, we get to clearly know about our tendency.
To some, It is fantastic adventure that experience exotic cultures.
>>To some, it is a fantastic adventure to experience exotic cultures.
But to others, they have some trouble with strange customs and try to keep their own way.
>>CORRECT!
I am definetely the former type.
>>CORRECT!
I\'m always curious about foreign cultures.
>>CORRECT!
So, trip abroad is a precious chance to fullfil my curiosity and I tried to experience their traditional ways as much as possible.
>>So, a trip abroad is a precious chance to fulfill my curiosity and I tried to experience their traditional ways as much as possible. I went London for 10 days on this July.
>>I stayed in London for 10 days last July.
During my journey, I tried to eat various english foods.
>>During my journey, I tried to eat various English foods.
Some dishes felt greasy but mostly it was good so I didn\'t eat the instant rice packed from korea.
>>Some dishes were greasy but mostly, they were good so I didn\'t eat the instant packed rice from Korea.
It was Interesting that London people prefered to eating outside.
>> It was interesting that London people prefered to eat outside.
At lunch time, people ate in everywhere - on the road, in the front of church and at the riverside even pegions were gathering.
>>At lunchtime, people ate everywhere - on the road, in front of the church and at the riverside even while pegions were gathering.
It seems like a little bit unsanotary or unrefined, but I bought a sandwich and ate like them.
>> It seems like a little bit unsanitary or unrefined, but I bought a sandwich and ate like them.
And I felt completely assimilate with this city
>>And I felt completely assimilated in this city.
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