ESSAY
학생이 쓴 원문
ESSAY: Teachers and medical staffs are paid the highest salary in Bhutan, in relation to this, who do you think should receive the highest salary in your country? Please elaborate.
I think that medical staffs should receive the highest salary in my country.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
First, medical staffs always expose to germs and viruses from many patients. They can cause some diseases to medical staffs as well. Even though medical staffs know about that well, they work to save the patients.
Secondly, they sacrifice a lot of time to hospital. If an emergency situation appears, they can\'t even sleep.
Lastly, they have to study hard forever until they quit the job. Because dealing with life of people is hard and important than anything else.
Therefore, the medical staffs deserve a high salary.
강사 첨삭
HAPPY FRIDAY!
Thank you so much Bo [이름] for your efforts in this class.
You\'ve been impressive through it all and I highly encourage for you to continually improve your skills.
As for your composition, yes, I definitely agree, especially now with the COVID-19.
Medical staffs are on high demand.
Good job!
~Teacher Eve.
I think that medical staffs should receive the highest salary in my country.
>> I think that the medical staffs should receive the highest salary in my country.
There are some reasons to support my opinion.
>> Correct!
First, medical staffs always expose to germs and viruses from many patients.
>> First, the medical staffs always exposed to germs and viruses from many patients.
They can cause some diseases to medical staffs as well.
>> Correct!
Even though medical staffs know about that well, they work to save the patients.
>> Correct!
Secondly, they sacrifice a lot of time to hospital.
>> Secondly, they sacrifice a lot of time in the hospital.
If an emergency situation appears, they can\'t even sleep.
>> Correct!
Lastly, they have to study hard forever until they quit the job.
>> Lastly, they have to study hard forever until they quit their job.
Because dealing with life of people is hard and important than anything else.
>> Because dealing with the life of people is hard and it\'s most important than anything else.
Therefore, the medical staffs deserve a high salary.
>> Correct!
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