essay about \"Have you ever been to a farm?\"
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I have been to a few farms. Actually my grandfather owns a farm growing many kinds of vegetables, but that\'s out of the topic so move on to another farm I have been to. I have been to a sheep farm where it locates on Daegwallyeong, you can see many sheep!
and you could feed them if you pay the feeding fee, and you can see beautiful view of Daegwallyeong sheep farm\'s Royal azalea too.
Another thing, I have been to the Jindo dog farm too! (it\'s not really a farm, it\'s just where pure Jindo dogs live and being protected and being researched) there were a lot of Jindo dogs and they were really cute!!!! plus there was a puppy too! because one Jindo dog had puppies! we feed them and watch them playing around their mother they were so cute!
강사 첨삭
Hi, Yoon[이름]!
Wow! You have been to many farms then. I guess you enjoy doing that and seeing some animals, too.
Thank you for sharing!
~T. Roanne ^_^
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Yes, I have been to a few farms.
>> Correct!
Actually my grandfather owns a farm growing many kinds of vegetables, but that\'s out of the topic so move on to another farm I have been to.
>> Actually, my grandfather owns a farm where there are many kinds of vegetables growing, but that\'s out of the topic, so move on to another farm that I have been to.
I have been to a sheep farm where it locates on Daegwallyeong, you can see many sheep!
>> Correct!
and you could feed them if you pay the feeding fee, and you can see beautiful view of Daegwallyeong sheep farm\'s Royal azalea too.
and you could feed them if you pay the feeding fee, and you can see beautiful view of Daegwallyeong sheep farm\'s Royal azalea too.
>>You can feed them if you pay the feeding fee, and you can see beautiful view of Daegwallyeong sheep farm\'s Royal azalea, too.
Another thing, I have been to the Jindo dog farm too!
Another thing, I have been to the Jindo dog farm too!
>>Correct!
It\'s not really a farm, it\'s just where pure Jindo dogs live and being protected and being researched.
>> Correct!
there were a lot of Jindo dogs and they were really cute!!!!
>> There were a lot of Jindo dogs and they were really cute!!!!
plus there was a puppy too!
>>Plus there was a puppy too!
because one Jindo dog had puppies! were so cute!
>> Because one Jindo dog had puppies!
we feed them and watch them playing around their mother they
>> We feed them and watch them playing around their mother, they were so cute!
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