Essay: about my grandparents

My grandmother was a great person. She did everything for her grandchildren.When I was young, my mother lived in the city to make money to support her family.I lived with my grandparents and my grandmom has taken care of me all the time until I went to high school in Seoul, moving from my home town. She filled in my mother. She helped and encouraged me to concentrate on my study. She has never scolded me even if I made a mistake.She was so proud of me. We were not rich at that time, but she made all the efforts to feed us well, dress us, and support us. Although they did not have any academic background, they had the wisdoms of life, how to respect others and how to love their kids. Thanks to her, I could grow without being emotionally hurt by any external impacts.When I think of her, I feel sorry because she scarified her life for her family and she has never lived an easy or decent life. She suffered from dementia and could not move her body for almost 3 years until she passed away.

Hello there again Sir [이름]! An inspirational composition! I suddenly missed my grandmother. ^^ I know that she is really proud of you because you are a great person.  I believe that grandmothers are the people who show their love to their kids and grandchildren without asking anything in return. We should always be proud of our grandparents. Thank you for this marvelous essay. You were able to compose sensible sentences. ^^ Great! You are improving! Keep it up! See you in class! Teacher Nina   My grandmother was a great person. >> Correct! >> OR: My grandmother was an admirable person. She did everything for her grandchildren. >> Correct! When I was young, my mother lived in the city to make money to support her family. >> Correct! I lived with my grandparents and my grandmom has taken care of me all the time until I went to high school in Seoul, moving from my home town. >> Correct! >> Better: I lived with my grandparents. My grandmother took good care of me all the time until I went to highschool in Seoul, moving from my hometown. She filled in my mother. >> Correct! >> OR: She did the responsibilities of my mother. She helped and encouraged me to concentrate on my study. >> She helped me and encouraged me to concentrate on my studies. She has never scolded me even if I made a mistake. >> Correct! >> Better: She never scolded me even if I made a mistake. She was so proud of me. >> Correct! We were not rich at that time, but she made all the efforts to feed us well, dress us, and support us. >> Correct! >> OR: We were not rich at that time, but she made all the efforts such as to feed, dress, and support us. Although they did not have any academic background, they had the wisdoms of life, how to respect others and how to love their kids. >> Correct! >> OR: Although they didn\'t have any academic background, they had the wisdom and they know how to respect and love orher people especially their kids. Thanks to her, I could grow without being emotionally hurt by any external impacts. >> Correct! When I think of her, I feel sorry because she scarified her life for her family and she has never lived an easy or decent life. >> Did you mean: When I think of her, I feel sorry because she sacrificed her life for her family and she never lived an easy or decent life.  She suffered from dementia and could not move her body for almost 3 years until she passed away. >> Correct! >> OR: She suffered from Dementia and wasn\'t able to move her body for almost three years until she passed away.