Essay about Stella
학생이 쓴 원문
My name is [이름] [이름]. '[이름]' is my family name and '[이름]' is my first name. However, you can call me 'Stella', because it is my catholic name. I'm 20 years old in Korean age. I want to be a professor, and I want study social communication between people.
I will graduate Gyeonggi Science Highschool for the Gifted in February! I'm very pleasure that I have studied biology with the gifted student. Also, I feel very happy that I can study biology more 4 years in the best University in Korea, Seoul National University.
My hobby is knitting, I already gave my handmade scarf to friend and mother. Today I find a cross-stitch kit! I will start it after finish this essay. Nowadays, I enrolled piano academy to study piano. After 6 months, maybe 'playing piano' will be my another hobby.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Stella!
Thank your for sending in your essay about your self. Greatly appreciated. ^^
Oh my. You\'re realy going to Seoul University? Awesome!
It is my honor to become a teacher a gifted student like you!^^
Biology is a very good major. I\'m sure you will become an excellent professor someday. :)
Catch you later!
~ Teacher Alice
My name is [이름] [이름].
>> Correct!
\'[이름]\' is my family name and \'[이름]\' is my first name.
>> Correct!
However, you can call me \'Stella\', because it is my catholic name.
>> Correct!
>> OR: However, you can call me \'Stella\', as it is my catholic name.
I\'m 20 years old in Korean age.
>> Correct!
I want to be a professor, and I want study social communication between people.
>> I want to be a professor, and I want to study social communication among people.I will graduate Gyeonggi Science Highschool for the Gifted in February!
>> I will graduate from Gyeonggi Science Highschool for the Gifted in February!
I\'m very pleasure that I have studied biology with the gifted student.
>> I\'m very pleasured that I have studied biology with the gifted classmates. Also, I feel very happy that I can study biology more 4 years in the best University in Korea, Seoul National University.
>> Also, I feel very happy that I can study biology 4 years more in the best university in Korea, Seoul National University.My hobby is knitting, I already gave my handmade scarf to friend and mother.
>> My hobby is knitting, I already ga ve my handmade scarf to my friend and mother.
Today I find a cross-stitch kit!
>> Today, I found a cross-stitch kit!
>> OR: I found a cross-stitch kit today!I will start it after finish this essay.
>> I will start doing it after doing this essay.
>> OR: I will start doing it after having this essay finished.
>> OR: I will start doing it after finishing this essay .
Nowadays, I enrolled piano academy to study piano.
>> Nowadays, I enrolled in a piano lesson in a piano academy.
After 6 months, maybe \'playing piano\' will be my another hobby.
>> Correct!
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