Essay:Although parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in th
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I agree that parents undeniably hold a fundamental role in raising a child. From birth , they provide fundamental experiences that shape a child\'s understanding of the world which are emotional and moral guidence, initial socialization, and education and learning. However, while parents play a central role, outside influence also significantly impact a child\'s develpment which are peer relationship, educational institutions, media and technology, and community and socail environment. So I think that parents and external influences should interact dynamically in shaping a child\'s development.
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I agree that parents undeniably hold a fundamental role in raising a child.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
From birth , they provide fundamental experiences that shape a child\'s understanding of the world which are emotional and moral guidance, initial socialization, education and learning.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, while parents play a central role, outside influence also significantly impact a child\'s development which are peer relationship, educational institutions, media and technology, and community and social environment.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
So I think that parents and external influences should interact dynamically in shaping a child\'s development.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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