Essay continues

2013-03-25 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Essay about Modern Technology continues from the last classe due to file size. Now due to a smart phone and a laptop, we are connected to the company for 24 hours a day, and not able to get away from works even a minute. Is your life much better and happier than those days when we did not have such technologies? My answer is no. The more sophisticated technology is developed and introduced, the harder life we will live. Technology brings more stress and confusion.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!

Thanks for the opinion that you shared about your homework.

We\'ll talk about it more on our class.

~~ T. Nina

Essay about Modern Technology continues from the last classe due to file size.

>> Essay about Modern Technology continued from the last writing board to the limited file size.

Now due to a smart phone and a laptop, we are connected to the company for 24 hours a day, and not able to get away from works even a minute.

>>Now, due to smart phones and laptops, we are connected to the company 24 hours a day and we are unable to get away from work even for a minute.

Is your life much better and happier than those days when we did not have such technologies?

My answer is no.

>> CORRECT

The more sophisticated technology is developed and introduced, the harder life we will live.

>> CORRECT

Technology brings more stress and confusion.

>> CORRECT

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