Essay: Discuss what could be done to increase the public's respect for police officers.

2013-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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In the past in 60’s and 70’s before the democratization movement uprose in Korea, the society was under control of the dictatorship. No one could speak up or made critical comments against the government’s policies or enforcement. Everybody kept silent and maintained low profile not to be put in jail. The government was so authoritative and arrogant. The police officers were not an exception. These days, it is completely contrary. Some police officers are beaten by intoxicated people. The meaning of democracy has been incorrectly understood by people since the democratization movement. Some people think that the police exist to protect and serve citizens. It is somewhat true, but the police are not to protect those who violate laws or infringe innocent people’s interest and right. To some extent, the police or police officers brought the disgrace upon themselves by conducting wrong doings like committing crimes. To resore public's respect, they must set and pursue the high leve

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A delightful Wednesday to you Sir [이름]^^ I do agree with you! Police officers should do something to gain the trust of the citizens. They are usually involved in crimes. The policemen in my country are also involved in some problems and they are being questioned by citizens. I think the space was not enough for your last sentence, you can tell it in class. We can also have this topic tonight. I am impressed with your sentences today. ^^ Keep up the good work! You freely expressed your thoughts! Wonderful! See you! Teacher Nina   In the past in 60’s and 70’s before the democratization movement uprose in Korea, the society was under control of the dictatorship. >> Did you mean: The society was under the control of the dictatorship before the democratization movement uprose in Korea in the year 60\'s and 70\'s. No one could speak up or made critical comments against the government’s policies or enforcement. >> No one could speak up or make critical comments against the government\'s policies or enforcement. >> OR: No one could express his/her feelings about the government\'s policies. Everybody kept silent and maintained low profile not to be put in jail. >> Did you mean:  Everybody kept silent and maintained a low profile life in order for them not to be put in jail. The government was so authoritative and arrogant. >> Correct! The police officers were not an exception. >> Correct! These days, it is completely contrary. >> Correct! Some police officers are beaten by intoxicated people. >> Correct! >> OR: Some police officers are overpowered by intoxicated people. The meaning of democracy has been incorrectly understood by people since the democratization movement. >> Did you mean: The meaning of democracy has been misunderstood by people since the democratization movement. Some people think that the police exist to protect and serve citizens. >> Correct! >> OR: Some people think that police force exist to protect and serve citizens. It is somewhat true, but the police are not to protect those who violate laws or infringe innocent people’s interest and right. >> Correct! To some extent, the police or police officers brought the disgrace upon themselves by conducting wrong doings like committing crimes. >> To some extent, the police or police officers brought disgrace upon themselves by conducting wrong doings like committing crimes. To resore public\'s respect, they must set and pursue the high leve >> Did you mean: To restore the public\'s respect, the must set and pursue high level... ( I think you were not able to finish this sentence.^^  )

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