Essay: Do you ever think sleep wastes the valuable time spent doing useful things?

2019-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

When I was young, I thought that sleeping is unnecessary, wasting of my time. But now I realize that sleeping is indispensable for our life. There are three reasons. The first one is that, physically, we can re-energize our body, rehabilitating our cells. The second reason is that, mentally, we can forget difficulties of daily stuff. We also can rethink complex things before or during sleeping, giving a chance to balance our decision. Finally, we can have a wonderful dream while sleeping. There is a famous quotation from Bernard Shaw, \"You see things; and you say \'Why?\'. But I dream things that never were; and I say \'Why not?\'\".

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir Jong Moo! Thank you for this. Sleep is definitely necessary for ones well-being.
-T. Beth
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When I was young, I thought that sleeping is unnecessary, wasting of my time.
>>>  When I was young, I thought that sleeping is unnecessary, just a waste of my time.  
But now I realize that sleeping is indispensable for our life.
>>> correct 
There are three reasons.
>>> correct   
The first one is that, physically, we can re-energize our body, rehabilitating our cells.
>>> correct   
The second reason is that, mentally, we can forget difficulties of daily stuff.
>>> correct   
We also can rethink complex things before or during sleeping, giving a chance to balance our decision.
>>> We also can rethink of complex things before or during sleeping, giving a chance to balance our decision.   
Finally, we can have a wonderful dream while sleeping.
>>> correct   
There is a famous quotation from Bernard Shaw, \"You see things; and you say \'Why?\'. 
But I dream things that never were; and I say \'Why not?\'\".
>>> correct   
>>> OR: There is a famous quote from Bernard Shaw that says, \"You see things; and you say \'Why?\'. But I dream things that never were; and I say \'Why not?\'\".

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