ESSAY: Do you think bullying should be made a crime or is it part of growing up?

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This is another tough question that I have ever received as an essay homework. 

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 It depends on how we consider about human being. 

>> It depends on how we consider human beings. 
 I think there are two viewpoints about human, one is that human nature is fundamentally good and the other is in an opposite aspect.

>> I think there are two viewpoints about human, one is that human nature is fundamentally good and the other is in the opposite aspect.
 In the first point of view, bullying can be regarded as a part of growing up.

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 Bullying happens since they do not know exactly what is wrong. 

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 Hence, prudent education can get rid of bullying.

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 On the other hand, when we ponder on the second viewpoint, bully can be treated as a crime. 

>>On the other hand, when we ponder on the second viewpoint, bullying can be treated as a crime. 
 These days, some bullying cases go beyond the line where we think they are just prank.

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 Sometimes, victims are seriously hurt and even consider committing suicide.

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 For these cases, we need to involve the governmental power. 

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 To sum up, I think most bullying incidents can be overcome by careful education, but occasionally we need to apply a legal measure to clarify that bullying is a really terrible thing.

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