ESSAY: Do you think time travel will be possible in the future? If you will be given the chance to t
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Thesedays, some people argue that time trip would be possible in the future due to advanced technology. I also thoroughly believe that those who want to go past could get a chance to see their special event.
Some people think it is impossible that returing to the past. Because anyone can not experience the travel, although many scientist have tried to develop technology for about 40 years.
However, I hold the view traveling to the past is possible if experts of each fields develop their technology together.
According to article, people who studied together got better score than those who studied alone.
If I get a chance to go back past, I wish to meet my grandfather who died last year. He used to made rice cakes for me on my
every birthdays and enjoyed spending time talking to each other. I always missed him since I have great memories with him.
There is no doubt it is not easy to travel to go past. Nevertheless, people who have nice memories always want to go past.
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~T. Irene~
These days, some people argue that time trip would be possible in the future due to advanced technology.
>>> These days, some people argue that time travel would be possible in the future due to advance technology.
I also thoroughly believe that those who want to go past could get a chance to see their special event.
>>> I also thoroughly believe that those who want to back go the past could get a chance to see what they want to witness.
Some people think it is impossible that returing to the past.
>>> Some people think it is impossible to return to the past.
Because anyone can not experience the travel, although many scientist have tried to develop technology for about 40 years.
>>> Because nobody experienced it yet although many scientists have tried to develop this technology for the past 40 years.
However, I hold the view traveling to the past is possible if experts of each fields develop their technology together.
>>> However, I hold the view that traveling to the past would only be possible if experts work together on this.
According to article, people who studied together got better score than those who studied alone.
>>> According to a study, people who studied together got better scores than those who studied alone.
If I get a chance to go back past, I wish to meet my grandfather who died last year.
>>> If I get a chance to travel back to the past, I wish to meet my grandfather who died last year.
He used to made rice cakes for me on my every birthdays and enjoyed spending time talking to each other.
>>> He used to make rice cakes for me on my birthday and we would enjoy spending the time talking to each other.
I always missed him since I have great memories with him.
>>> I always miss him since I have great memories with him.
There is no doubt it is not easy to travel to go past.
>>> There is no doubt that time-travel is not easy or even possible.
Nevertheless, people who have nice memories always want to go past.
>>> Nevertheless, people who have nice memories would always want to go back to their past.
~T. Irene~
These days, some people argue that time trip would be possible in the future due to advanced technology.
>>> These days, some people argue that time travel would be possible in the future due to advance technology.
I also thoroughly believe that those who want to go past could get a chance to see their special event.
>>> I also thoroughly believe that those who want to back go the past could get a chance to see what they want to witness.
Some people think it is impossible that returing to the past.
>>> Some people think it is impossible to return to the past.
Because anyone can not experience the travel, although many scientist have tried to develop technology for about 40 years.
>>> Because nobody experienced it yet although many scientists have tried to develop this technology for the past 40 years.
However, I hold the view traveling to the past is possible if experts of each fields develop their technology together.
>>> However, I hold the view that traveling to the past would only be possible if experts work together on this.
According to article, people who studied together got better score than those who studied alone.
>>> According to a study, people who studied together got better scores than those who studied alone.
If I get a chance to go back past, I wish to meet my grandfather who died last year.
>>> If I get a chance to travel back to the past, I wish to meet my grandfather who died last year.
He used to made rice cakes for me on my every birthdays and enjoyed spending time talking to each other.
>>> He used to make rice cakes for me on my birthday and we would enjoy spending the time talking to each other.
I always missed him since I have great memories with him.
>>> I always miss him since I have great memories with him.
There is no doubt it is not easy to travel to go past.
>>> There is no doubt that time-travel is not easy or even possible.
Nevertheless, people who have nice memories always want to go past.
>>> Nevertheless, people who have nice memories would always want to go back to their past.
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