ESSAY: Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone ir

2015-01-21 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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I agree with the opinion that education should be provided to everyone. If there is not the public education, some children who cannot take any proper education will learn negative things from their surrounding bad situations. It can lead to criminals. Also, if they are not educated about what they should know like how to deal with emergent accident or how to communicate with each other well, they may not be able to maintain the normal lives. Hence, we should give all the children the appropriate education regardless of wealth.

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Hello there, Robin!!! Great job on you essay. I heard about that famous drama show and it is very popular in other countries as well. I know that with continuous  practice, it will really help you remember all the things that you have learned in class. I can see that you can be successful in speaking the language. Have a great day!!! T. Jeny   I agree with the opinion that education should be provided to everyone. >>correct If there is not the public education, some children who cannot take any proper education will learn negative things from their surrounding bad situations. >>If we don\'t have public schools, some children who can\'t have proper education will learn negative things from their surroundings. It can lead to criminals. >>That can lead to crimes. Also, if they are not educated about what they should know like how to deal with emergent accident or how to communicate with each other well, they may not be able to maintain the normal lives. >>In addition, if they are not educated about how to deal with emergencies and communicate with other people, they won\'t live a normal life. Hence, we should give all the children the appropriate education regardless of wealth. >>correct 

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