Essay: favorite thing I want to do with my family

2013-04-25 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

Actually I like playing tennis so I spend 3 or 4 hours on playing tennis every weekend, which is obviously the thing my wife hates the most. My theory is that I need to exercise on a weekend since I do not have enough time to do that during weekdays and, moreover, the sport is the only thing I do to get rid of stress from daily tough works. After playing tennis on a Saturday and Sunday morning, I usually get home about 11 o’clock and go out with my wife and daughter to go shopping, visit our parents, or go to a restaurant. Going to a good restaurant and enjoying delicious food is one of my favorites. Secondly, having dinner together with my wife and daughter is the thing I do not want to miss. Talking about small things with them over a glass of wine at dinner table is the happiest moment I enjoy. If I can afford, I would like to travel to other countries with my family as well.

강사 첨삭

Good evening Sir [이름]!

I hope you had a fantastic day today.

Anyway, I think you can afford to travel overseas with your family if you want to.

As they say, \'if there\'s a will, there\'s a way\'.

See you later!

Take care.

Teacher Nina

Actually I like playing tennis so I spend 3 or 4 hours on playing tennis every weekend, which is obviously the thing my wife hates the most.

>>>Actually, I like playing tennis so I spend 3 or 4 hours on playing tennis every weekend. Obviously, this thing is what my wife hates the most.

>>>Or: Since I like spending 3 or 4 hours on playing tennis every weekend, this is obviously the thing my wife hates the most.

My theory is that I need to exercise on a weekend since I do not have enough time to do that during weekdays and, moreover, the sport is the only thing I do to get rid of stress from daily tough works.

>>> My theory is that I need to exercise on weekends since I do not have enough time to do that during weekdays; moreover, that sport is the only thing that I do to get rid of stress from daily tough works.

After playing tennis on a Saturday and Sunday morning, I usually get home about 11 o’clock and go out with my wife and daughter to go shopping, visit our parents, or go to a restaurant.

>>> After playing tennis on a Saturday and Sunday mornings, I usually get home at about 11 o\'clock, then I go out with my wife and daughter to go shopping, visit our parents, or go to a restaurant.

Going to a good restaurant and enjoying delicious food is one of my favorites.

>>>Correct!

Secondly, having dinner together with my wife and daughter is the thing I do not want to miss.

>>>Correct!

Talking about small things with them over a glass of wine at dinner table is the happiest moment I enjoy.

>>>Correct!

If I can afford, I would like to travel to other countries with my family as well.

>>>Correct!

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