essay for July. 11.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it is better to work hard when young.
In Korea, many elderly people say, "It is easy to spend but difficult to earn." I do agree with them.
In particular,in this expanded life span era, we must consider and preare our future days by spend less and saving money as much as possible.
I know there are many old people who are suffering from poverty resulting from their not having worked hard when they were young.
It is not only a personal problem but also a serious social and national problem.
Of course, some people say, "It is very different to play when young or old."
I'd like to say that there must be a balance between the two but if I have to choose only one, I'll decide to work hard when I am still young.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [Name]! WOW!! This is a good writing! Almost perfectly correct. You\'re doing great! :) Thank you for your insight.
~T, Irene~
I think it is better to work hard when young.
>>> I think it is better to work hard when we are young.
In Korea, many elderly people say, \"It is easy to spend but difficult to earn.\"
>>> Correct.
I do agree with them.
>>> Correct.
In particular, in this expanded life span era, we must consider and preare our future days by spend less and saving money as much as possible.
>>> In particular, in this extended lifespan era, we must consider and prepare for our future by spending less and saving more money as much as possible or as much as we can.
I know there are many old people who are suffering from poverty resulting from their not having worked hard when they were young.
>>> I know there are many old people who are suffering from poverty resulting from not working hard when they were young.
It is not only a personal problem but also a serious social and national problem.
>>> Correct.
Of course, some people say, \"It is very different to play when young or old.\"
>>> Of course, some people say, \"It is very different when you are young and when you grow old.\"
I\'d like to say that there must be a balance between the two but if I have to choose only one, I\'ll decide to work hard when I am still young.
>>> Correct.
OR>>> I\'d like to say that there must be a balance between the two but if I have to choose only one, I\'ll decide to work hard while I am still young.
~T, Irene~
I think it is better to work hard when young.
>>> I think it is better to work hard when we are young.
In Korea, many elderly people say, \"It is easy to spend but difficult to earn.\"
>>> Correct.
I do agree with them.
>>> Correct.
In particular, in this expanded life span era, we must consider and preare our future days by spend less and saving money as much as possible.
>>> In particular, in this extended lifespan era, we must consider and prepare for our future by spending less and saving more money as much as possible or as much as we can.
I know there are many old people who are suffering from poverty resulting from their not having worked hard when they were young.
>>> I know there are many old people who are suffering from poverty resulting from not working hard when they were young.
It is not only a personal problem but also a serious social and national problem.
>>> Correct.
Of course, some people say, \"It is very different to play when young or old.\"
>>> Of course, some people say, \"It is very different when you are young and when you grow old.\"
I\'d like to say that there must be a balance between the two but if I have to choose only one, I\'ll decide to work hard when I am still young.
>>> Correct.
OR>>> I\'d like to say that there must be a balance between the two but if I have to choose only one, I\'ll decide to work hard while I am still young.
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