essay for today

2012-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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I can't easily sleep tonight, so I turn on my computer and start writing something here. I think I feel empty inside tonight. I know that even though I have boyfriend, he can't fill me up. Why I feel empty? I want to feel connected to God, but I don't know how to talk with him. I long to get closer to him and have an real intimate relationship with him, but he seems so far from me. Also I always want to feel connected to people I work with, but unfortunately I've been working totally alone here. In my case, it means there are rarely rewards for working hard. Now I realize that relatedness and connectedness are the most important things in my life.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]!! A pleasant Tuesday Morning!! I hope you were able to rest well despite of your situation last night. :) You\'re right with what you said about being connected with people. You know having a boyfriend doesn\'t mean being complete. Sometimes there are just things that we have to handle on your own. Relationships are complicated as many say. Reflect on your life, what have you done so far and what more can you do. Don\'t lose hear my dear! Everybody experieces those things too only in different ways..^^ Cheer up and smile! Face life and the day with the positive attitude and you\'ll be happy, you\'ll see! Have a great day sweetie! See yah in my class! T.Kristel I can\'t easily sleep tonight, so I turn on my computer and start writing something here. >>CORRECT!! I think I feel empty inside tonight. I know that even though I have boyfriend, he can\'t fill me up. >>CORRECT!!Why I feel empty? I want to feel connected to God, but I don\'t know how to talk with him. >>Why do I feel empty? or Why do I feel this way? CORRECT!!  I long to get closer to him and have an real intimate relationship with him, but he seems so far from me. >>I long to get closer to him and have a  real intimate relationship with him, but he seems so far from me. Also I always want to feel connected to people I work with, but unfortunately I\'ve been working totally alone here. >>CORRECT!! In my case, it means there are rarely rewards for working hard. >>For me, this means working hard is rarely rewarded. Now I realize that relatedness and connectedness are the most important things in my life. >>CORRECT!! >>or Now I realize that relationships are the most important things in my life.

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