Essay: Have you ever had problems sleeping? What did you do about it?

2019-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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Many people had an experience that they could not sleep at night. I also had such experiences, especially when I had concerns in my mind. Fortunately, I have several remedies. My first remedy for insomnia is that I take a shower with warm water. If it does not work, as a second solution, I drink a glass of wine. It helps the blood circulation, often driving me into sleeping. - Caution 1: just one, not two or more! My final remedy is reading a book. In this situation, I prefer to choose difficult books such as \"Guns, Germs and Steel\" by Jared Diamond. - Caution 2: Please do not read using a Laptop or Smartphone. Electromagnetic waves could disturb your sleep!

강사 첨삭

Hello Jong Moo. Thank you for this. Good tip! I should try doing this if I have a hard time sleeping, especially with the wine.
- T. Beth
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Many people had an experience that they could not sleep at night.
>>> Many people had an experience where they could not sleep at night.  
>>> OR: Many people had an experience of not being able to sleep at night.
I also had such experiences, especially when I had concerns in my mind.
>>>  correct  
Fortunately, I have several remedies.
>>>  correct  
My first remedy for insomnia is that I take a shower with warm water.
>>>  correct  
If it does not work, as a second solution, I drink a glass of wine.
>>>  correct  
It helps the blood circulation, often driving me into sleeping.
>>> OR: It helps in good blood circulation and often driving me into sleeping.   
- Caution 1: just one, not two or more!
>>> correct   
>>> OR: But take note, you should drink just  one glass, not two or more.
My final remedy is reading a book.
>>> correct   
In this situation, I prefer to choose difficult books such as \"Guns, Germs and Steel\" by Jared Diamond.
>>>  correct  
- Caution 2: Please do not read using a Laptop or Smartphone. 
>>>  correct  
>>> OR: However, it is advisable not to use a laptop or a smartphone.
Electromagnetic waves could disturb your sleep!
>>> correct   

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