ESSAY: Have your feelings towards Christmas changed since you were a child?
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was a child, Christmas meant nothing to me.
This is because, at that time, my parents are Buddhists and we often went to a temple, not having a chance to go to a church and knowing about Jesus.
Christmas is just one of holidays for me.
When I was a high school student, my friends had a party at the Christmas day.
Hence, Christmas is a day that we had enjoyable time with food and music.
When I was a junior student at university, one of my friend suggested me to visit a church.
In the church, I luckily met a good mentor, becoming a Christian and try to follow the lesson in the Bible such as the Beatitudes.
Even though I am not a perfect Christian, now I know the true meaning of Christmas.
It is a time to share the god\'s great love with our neighbors.
강사 첨삭
Hello Sir Jong Moo. Thank you for this. So I guess you never enjoyed believing in Santa Clause as a kid.
- T. Beth
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When I was a child, Christmas meant nothing to me.>>> correct
This is because, at that time, my parents are Buddhists and we often went to a temple, not having a chance to go to a church and knowing about Jesus.
This is because, at that time, my parents are Buddhists and we often went to a temple, not having a chance to go to a church and knowing about Jesus.
>>> correct
Christmas is just one of holidays for me.
Christmas is just one of holidays for me.
>>> Christmas is just one of the holidays to me.
When I was a high school student, my friends had a party at the Christmas day.
>>> When I was a high school student, my friends had a party on Christmas day.
Hence, Christmas is a day that we had enjoyable time with food and music.
>>> correct
When I was a junior student at university, one of my friend suggested me to visit a church.
When I was a junior student at university, one of my friend suggested me to visit a church.
>>> When I was a junior student in the university, one of my friends suggested me to visit a church.
In the church, I luckily met a good mentor, becoming a Christian and try to follow the lesson in the Bible such as the Beatitudes.
>>> In the church, I luckily met a good mentor, became a Christian and tried to follow the lesson in the Bible such as the Beatitudes.
Even though I am not a perfect Christian, now I know the true meaning of Christmas.
>>> correct
It is a time to share the god\'s great love with our neighbors.
It is a time to share the god\'s great love with our neighbors.
>>> It is a time to share God\'s great love with our neighbors.
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