Essay homework (04/20)
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi Mike,
I appreciate the time that you spent doing your homework. Helping others with your time, money, or effort doesn’t just make the world better but also improves you. Studies demonstrate that the very act of giving back to the community helps your satisfaction, well-being, and feeling of prosperity. But of course, everything even help should have limits. ^^
~Teacher Cathy
In my opinion, Helping needy people is important
because how I could get my job, reputation, friends and anything else was that
I\'m just lucky.
>> In my opinion, helping needy people is important because how I could get my job, reputation, friends and anything else was that I\'m just lucky.
OR>>Helping those in need is important to me because I was just lucky to get my job, reputation, friends, and other things.
So, I think I have to disstribute my luck to needy people whom were just unlucky by helping them.
>>So, I think I have to distribute my luck
to needy people who were just unlucky that they need people helping them.
OR>> Therefore, I believe I must distribute my luck
to those in need who were just unlucky that they need people helping them.
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