Essay homework
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Q. Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?
A. I never agree with the opinion. I believe that environment makes a person. Even though each human has their own natural inclination, They must be influenced by environment. It can draw out potential of people more positively to develope, but it also can weaken good tendency, too. Regardless of having good characteristic or not, if people have grown with good education, belief, and support from parents, the possibility to think and behave well would rise.
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A. I never agree with the opinion.
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OR>>> I don\'t agree with statement.
I believe that environment makes a person.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Even though each human has their own natural inclination, they must be influenced by the environment.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
It can draw out potential of people more positively to develope, but it also can weaken good tendency, too.
>>> It can draw out potential of people to positively develop, but it also can weaken good tendency.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Regardless of having good characteristic or not, if people have grown with good education, belief, and support from parents, the possibility to think and behave well would rise.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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