essay homework(I write only the body and except the introduction and conclusion.)

How are you [이름]?

I hope you welcomed the brand new year with optimism and enthusiasm. Thanks for writing this. If you have some questions, please raise them in class. See you tomorrow!

~Teacher Shanee^^,

It would be true that urban life is more lively and convenient as there are many facilities available such as public transportations, museums and department store.

>>> It would be true that urban life is livelier and more convenient as there are many facilities available such as public transportations, museums and department stores.

Naturally, opportunities enjoying culture allow city dwellers to entertain, which are a effective way for children\'s education.

>>> Naturally, people think that opportunities which allow dwellers to enjoy cultures and be entertained and children to learn more are found in the urban.

In addition, with the development of medical technology, we have become able to enjoy high quality medical care.

>>> In addition, in cities, we can enjoy high quality medical care.

As a result, nowadays the quality of our lives has increased.

>>> As a result, people move to urban areas because the quality of life there has increased.

 On the other hand, for some reasons other people believe that dwelling in the countryside can make people\'s lives more comfortable as there are less mention and stress from school or work.

>>> On the other hand, for some reasons other people believe that dwelling in the countryside is more comfortable as there is less stress from school and work.  [I hope you could explain to me the meaning of less mention.] 

When we compare to the city life, people in rural areas are uncompetitive because anyone does not give them pressure.

>>> When we compare people in urban areas from those in rural places, the latter are uncompetitive because no one pressures them.

Furthermore, since there are a few cars and factories, they do not affect pollution and they can get fresh ingredients and seasonal food which could make our bodies healthier from near farms at affordable prices.

>>> Furthermore, since there are a few cars and factories, they are not affected by pollution and they can get fresh and healthy ingredients and seasonal food easily and at affordable prices.