Essay homework-Nothing is more important to a country's future than education. To what extent do you

2013-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

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Many governments emphasize the important of education and develped countries try to support. Building new school in developing countries is the one of basic relief business by funds. I believe that nothing is more important to a country's future that education. First of all, we can create a heathy society from education. According to an article on the crime rate correlated with education, the more people take good quality education, the higher the percent of employment rise. However, the rate of crime is getting to decrease. Secondly, well educated people could be not only good resource but also the strength of a nation. Steven Jobs, Bill gates represent the company & country. I mentioned education affect the society, company, nation in a good way. That's why I agree that education is the most important to a country's future.

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Good Morning [이름], I strongly agree with you. Your country is a good example, even thou it\'s a small country. It\'s also one of the richest country because of the people who work hard to learn and develop their country. With education, you tend to discover things that can help you success and your success is also the country\'s pride. Thank you very much for your answers.  See you later!   T. Sheela Many governments emphasize the important of education and develped countries try to support. >>Many governments emphasize the important of education, Also, developed countries try to support the... Building new school in developing countries is the one of basic relief business by funds. >>Building a new school in a developing countries is one of the way to develop the country\'s future. I believe that nothing is more important to a country\'s future that education.>>I believe that nothing is more important to a country\'s future other than education.First of all, we can create a heathy society from education. >>Correct! According to an article on the crime rate correlated with education, the more people take good quality education, the higher the percent of employment rise. >>According to an article, the crime rate depend on how the people are educated. If more people gets a high quality of education, the higher the percentage of employment will be. However, the rate of crime is getting to decrease. >>And the crime rate will decrease.Secondly, well educated people could be not only good resource but also the strength of a nation. >>Secondly, well educated people are the source of strenght of the nation. Steven Jobs, Bill gates represent the company & country.>> Steven Jobs and Bill Gates represent their company and country.I mentioned education affect the society, company, nation in a good way. >>I mentioned that education affect the society, company and the nation in a good way. That\'s why I agree that education is the most important to a country\'s future. >>Correct!

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