Essay: How should someone who committed a crime for some good cause be punished?
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I think this problem should be to separate out two part.
>> I think this problem should be separated into two parts.
purpose and result
>> Correct!
>> OR: Those two are purpose and result.
at the first, we have to double check the purpose of someone who committed a crime for some good cause
>> At first, we have to double check the purpose of the committed crime for some good cause.
how much is that depth of truth?
>> How deep is the depth of the truth?
how much is that rate of good motivation about whole?
>> How much is the rate of good motivation about the whole situation?
meaning of crime is violating the law
>> The meaning of crime is the violation of the law.
but law is the tool which we just live more human being.
>> But the law is a tool for us to live more human.
so i mean law is a rule of two or more people.
>> So, it means that law is a rule of two or more people.
but imperfect human made imperfect law so we still modifying the law
>> But imperfect humans made the imperfect law, so we are still modifying the law.
If someone steals bread in the store and that trigger is too much starving thing. like jean valjean in Les Miserables of novel
>> If someone steals a bread in the store, then the trigger is starvation, like Jean Valjean in Les Miserables\' novel.
how can we punished him? he just want to be live
>> How can we punish him? He just wants to live.
second, Minor crimes can lead to social consensus.
>> Secondly, minor can lead to social consensus.
but if someone committed a major crime for good cause that is quite hard to judge.
>> But if someone committed a major crime for a good cause, that is quite hard to judge.
in other way if someone did with a bad intention turns out to be a good things, how could we punished someone?
>> In other words, if someone did a crime with a bad intentions but it turns out good, how could we punish the person?
The only thing we know our human accept imperfect and we have to enforced the law which we made.
>> The only thing we know is humans are imperfect and we have to enforce the law we made.
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