ESSAY: How will you advice smokers to stop smoking?

2020-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

학생이 쓴 원문

There are several good methods that we advice smokers to quit smoking. One pertinent method is showing evidences such as pictures and numbers. Typical examples include a lung picture covered with black nicotine or the number of fatalities died due to smoking in our neighborhood. Another good method is utilizing relationship. For instance, we can make a promise to stop smoking with our close friends and check the progress regularly. Also, we can make a group using SNS where we encourage each other with collective knowledge. Introducing a girlfriend who does not like smoking is a brilliant idea. The third method is expressing sympathy. I think saying like this \"I wish you stop smoking because I love you\" is the strongest advice. According to the book, techniques for persuasion written by J. Brown, sharing our feeling is one of the key ingredients for advice.

강사 첨삭

Great advice!

I definitely agree with your points, especially about the girlfriend part. That was funny!

Thank you so much once again for doing your homework, Mr. [이름]!

I\'m looking forward to our upcoming classes next week!

Have a great and prosperous new year!

~Teacher Eve.

There are several good methods that we advice smokers to quit smoking.

>>There are several methods that we advise smokers to quit smoking.
 One pertinent method is showing evidences such as pictures and numbers.

>> One pertinent method is by showing evidence such as pictures and numbers.
 Typical examples include a lung picture covered with black nicotine or the number of fatalities died due to smoking in our neighborhood.

>> Typical examples include a lung picture covered with black nicotine or the number of fatalities that died due to smoking in our neighborhood.
 Another good method is utilizing relationship.

>> Another good method is by utilizing a relationship.
 For instance, we can make a promise to stop smoking with our close friends and check the progress regularly.

>> Correct!
 Also, we can make a group using SNS where we encourage each other with collective knowledge.

>> Correct!
 Introducing a girlfriend who does not like smoking is a brilliant idea.

>> Correct!
 The third method is expressing sympathy.

>> The third method is by expressing sympathy.
 I think saying like this \"I wish you stop smoking because I love you\" is the strongest advice.

>> I think that by saying \"\"I wish you stop smoking because I love you\" is the strongest advice.
 According to the book, techniques for persuasion written by J. Brown, sharing our feeling is one of the key ingredients for advice.

>> According to the book, techniques for persuasion written by J. Brown, sharing our feelings is one of the key ingredients for advice.


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