ESSAY: If you are, hypothetically, an actor, what kind of role would you like to portray? Do you thi
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If I have a chance to act, I would like to portray a princess for dynasty periods. When I watched a drama about the Korea kingdoms, the princess looked beautiful. She wears dresses with glitter,veriety of colors and applys fancy accessaries. Besides that, she always takes a rest in a room with soft blanket and eats fancy foods. I think it would become nice experience for me.
Some people argue that actors could get lots of money as compared to other those who work in office. However, I strongly believe that actors work hard since they have to play regardless weather and own\'s condition. Besides that, the actors film on irregular time schedules, so they have difficulty to get along with their friends.
Due to advanced technologies, many people consider that robots replace actors in the future. On the other hand, I wish that these weird happening not occurs on TV. Because only human can show real emotion as well as outward appearance.
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Hello Kelly! ^_^ This is my suggestion, do not use \'and\', \'but\' and \'because\' to start your sentences. Try to avoid using and to make longer sentences. Ahja!
~ T. Irene ~
If I have a chance to act, I would like to portray a princess for dynasty periods.
>>> If I have a chance to play a role in a movie or in the theater, I would like to portray a princess during the dynasty periods.
When I watched a drama about the Korea kingdoms, the princess looked beautiful.
>>> In those historical movies I watched about the past dynasties, the princess looked beautiful.
She wears dresses with glitter,veriety of colors and applys fancy accessaries.
>>> She wears nice dresses with some glitters and a variety of colors. She also uses fancy accessories and jewelries.
Besides that, she always takes a rest in a room with soft blanket and eats fancy foods.
>>> Besides that, she always rests in a room with soft blankets and eats fancy foods.
I think it would become nice experience for me.
>>> I think it would become a nice experience for me.
Some people argue that actors could get lots of money as compared to other those who work in office.
>>> Some people argue that actors should get a higher pay as compared to those who work in offices.
However, I strongly believe that actors work hard since they have to play regardless weather and own\'s condition.
>>> However, I strongly believe that actors work hard since they have to work regardless of the weather and their personal condition.
Besides that, the actors film on irregular time schedules, so they have difficulty to get along with their friends.
>>> Besides that, actors film on irregular time schedules so they have difficulties socializing with their friends.
Due to advanced technologies, many people consider that robots replace actors in the future.
>>> Due to advance technologies, many people believe that robots can replace actors in the future.
On the other hand, I wish that these weird happening not occurs on TV.
>>> On the other hand, I wish that these weird happenings do not occur on TV.
Because only human can show real emotion as well as outward appearance.
>>> Because only a human can show real emotions through their appearances and expressions.
~ T. Irene ~
If I have a chance to act, I would like to portray a princess for dynasty periods.
>>> If I have a chance to play a role in a movie or in the theater, I would like to portray a princess during the dynasty periods.
When I watched a drama about the Korea kingdoms, the princess looked beautiful.
>>> In those historical movies I watched about the past dynasties, the princess looked beautiful.
She wears dresses with glitter,veriety of colors and applys fancy accessaries.
>>> She wears nice dresses with some glitters and a variety of colors. She also uses fancy accessories and jewelries.
Besides that, she always takes a rest in a room with soft blanket and eats fancy foods.
>>> Besides that, she always rests in a room with soft blankets and eats fancy foods.
I think it would become nice experience for me.
>>> I think it would become a nice experience for me.
Some people argue that actors could get lots of money as compared to other those who work in office.
>>> Some people argue that actors should get a higher pay as compared to those who work in offices.
However, I strongly believe that actors work hard since they have to play regardless weather and own\'s condition.
>>> However, I strongly believe that actors work hard since they have to work regardless of the weather and their personal condition.
Besides that, the actors film on irregular time schedules, so they have difficulty to get along with their friends.
>>> Besides that, actors film on irregular time schedules so they have difficulties socializing with their friends.
Due to advanced technologies, many people consider that robots replace actors in the future.
>>> Due to advance technologies, many people believe that robots can replace actors in the future.
On the other hand, I wish that these weird happening not occurs on TV.
>>> On the other hand, I wish that these weird happenings do not occur on TV.
Because only human can show real emotion as well as outward appearance.
>>> Because only a human can show real emotions through their appearances and expressions.
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