ESSAY: If you could go back in time, what would you like to change?
학생이 쓴 원문
Imagine that I can go back in time, what a fantastic thing it is!
I can meet my old friends, visit my old place and even see my first lover.
Furthermore, imagine that I can change something in my past, what a surprising thing it is!
I did a lot of mistakes in the past. Sometimes, I was dishonest, cheating my friends. Sometimes, I did wrong [이름]ces and decisions.
If I could change them, I would be better now.
However, I decide not to change anything in my past.
This is because there are causal relationships between my past and my present.
If I modify something in my past, I would be a rich person. But, as a side effect, there would be some alternations in my present.
Perhaps, I miss some of my precious acquaintances.
History is just history. I want to focus on my current life and do my best.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jong Moo. Thank you for this. Come to think of it, you\'re right. Things are how they are now because of the past decisions we made. If you are satisfied with your current situation, then there\'s no need to change your past.
- T. Beth
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Imagine that I can go back in time, what a fantastic thing it is!>>> correct
I can meet my old friends, visit my old place and even see my first lover.
I can meet my old friends, visit my old place and even see my first lover.
>>> I can meet my old friends, visit my old place and even see my first love.
Furthermore, imagine that I can change something in my past, what a surprising thing it is!
Furthermore, imagine that I can change something in my past, what a surprising thing it is!
>>> correct
I did a lot of mistakes in the past.
I did a lot of mistakes in the past.
>>> correct
Sometimes, I was dishonest, cheating my friends.
>>> Sometimes, I was dishonest, cheating on my friends.
Sometimes, I did wrong [이름]ces and decisions.
>>> correct
If I could change them, I would be better now.
If I could change them, I would be better now.
>>> correct
However, I decide not to change anything in my past.
However, I decide not to change anything in my past.
>>> correct
This is because there are causal relationships between my past and my present.
This is because there are causal relationships between my past and my present.
>>> correct
If I modify something in my past, I would be a rich person.
If I modify something in my past, I would be a rich person.
>>> correct
But, as a side effect, there would be some alternations in my present.
>>> correct
>>> OR: But is turn, there would be some changes in my present.
Perhaps, I miss some of my precious acquaintances.
Perhaps, I miss some of my precious acquaintances.
>>> correct
>>> OR: I would probably not come across some precious acquaintances.
History is just history.
History is just history.
>>> correct
I want to focus on my current life and do my best.
>>> correct
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