ESSAY: If you could have three wishes, what would those be?
학생이 쓴 원문
Assume that I have a chance to meet the Genie and being asked three wishes.
Well.. My three wishes are one for me, another for my family and the third for my country.
My first wish is that I want to have an artificial friend like JARVIS appeared in the movie of Iron Man.
He knows everything around my circumstance and give me an appropriate advice when I am in trouble.
The second wish is that I want my family members are healthy and achieve their goals.
These days, my mother is sick and going outside is not easy after a big surgery.
I especially hope my mother comes back in a good health condition and go around the world with me, including the beautiful Philippine.
My final wish is the re-unification of my country.
Since 1948, Korea is divided into two countries and the division causes a lot of problems such as instability, military costs and hostility towards people.
Historically, Korean is known as a peaceful people and I think the re-unification will recover that characteristics.
강사 첨삭
Hello Sir Jon Moo. Thank you for this. These wishes are great. I hope they do come true.
- T. Beth
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Assume that I have a chance to meet the Genie and being asked three wishes.>>> correct
Well.. My three wishes are one for me, another for my family and the third for my country.
Well.. My three wishes are one for me, another for my family and the third for my country.
>>> correct
My first wish is that I want to have an artificial friend like JARVIS appeared in the movie of Iron Man.
My first wish is that I want to have an artificial friend like JARVIS appeared in the movie of Iron Man.
>>> My first wish is that I want to have an artificial friend like JARVIS who appeared in the movie Iron Man.
He knows everything around my circumstance and give me an appropriate advice when I am in trouble.
>>> He knows everything around my circumstances and gives me an appropriate advice when I am in trouble.
The second wish is that I want my family members are healthy and achieve their goals.
>>> The second wish is that I want my family members to be healthy and achieve their goals.
These days, my mother is sick and going outside is not easy after a big surgery.
These days, my mother is sick and going outside is not easy after a big surgery.
>>> correct
I especially hope my mother comes back in a good health condition and go around the world with me, including the beautiful Philippine.
I especially hope my mother comes back in a good health condition and go around the world with me, including the beautiful Philippine.
>>> correct
My final wish is the re-unification of my country.
My final wish is the re-unification of my country.
>>> correct
Since 1948, Korea is divided into two countries and the division causes a lot of problems such as instability, military costs and hostility towards people.
Since 1948, Korea is divided into two countries and the division causes a lot of problems such as instability, military costs and hostility towards people.
>>> Since 1948, Korea has been divided into two countries and the division causes a lot of problems such as instability, military costs and hostility among people.
Historically, Korean is known as a peaceful people and I think the re-unification will recover that characteristics.
>>> Historically, Koreans are known as peaceful people and I think the re-unification will recover that characteristics.
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