Essay: if you knew that you would not fail, what endeavor you would attempt to do?
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If you were assured you would not fail, what endeavor would you attempt? Technically, it is a trick question. If there is no chance of failure, then it is not an "attempt". Anyway, regardless of whether I knew that I would not fail or not, I would like to attempt to get a master and a doctoral degree in the US although I completed the MBA course here in Korea. My major would be marketing and communication because they are essential parts to understand and to be expert at in current capitalized society. While studying, I like to travel to many places in overseas countries and meet various people who have different cultural backgrounds. Then, I like to work for the United Nation. My areas to work for would be helping countries to boost their economy and solving national conflicts in trading. At home, I wish I could spend quality time with my family although it would not easy to balance between work and life. But reality is that you cannot get everything.
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If you were assured you would not fail, what endeavor would you attempt?
Technically, it is a trick question.
>> Technically, it is a tricky question.
>> OR: It is a tricky question.
If there is no chance of failure, then it is not an \"attempt\".
>> Did you mean: If there is no chance of failing, then it is not an attempt.
>> OR: If there is no chance of being a failure, then there is no way to make an attempt.
Anyway, regardless of whether I knew that I would not fail or not, I would like to attempt to get a master and a doctoral degree in the US although I completed the MBA course here in Korea.
>> Anyway, regardless of whether I know that I would fail or not, I would like to attempt to get masters and doctoral degree in U.S. although I already completed MBA course here in Korea.
>> Better: Anyway, regardless of whether I would fail or not, I would like to attempt to get masters and a doctoral degree in the US although I completed MBA course here in Korea.
My major would be marketing and communication because they are essential parts to understand and to be expert at in current capitalized society.
>> My major would be Marketing and Communication because they are the essential parts that is needed to be understood to be an expert in the current society.
>> OR: My major would be Marketing and Communication because they are essential parts that is needed to be an expert in an advanced society.
While studying, I like to travel to many places in overseas countries and meet various people who have different cultural backgrounds.
>> While studying, I like to travel to many places like overseas and to meet various people who have different cultural backgrounds.
>> OR: While studying, I like to travel to many places like abroad to meet people who have various cultural backgrounds.
Then, I like to work for the United Nation.
>> Then, I like to work for the United Nations.
>> OR: I would like to be an employee of United Nations.
My areas to work for would be helping countries to boost their economy and solving national conflicts in trading.
>> Did you mean: My areas to work for would be helping countries to boost their economy and to solve national conflicts in terms of trading.
At home, I wish I could spend quality time with my family although it would not easy to balance between work and life. But reality is that you cannot get everything.
>> At home, I wish I could spend quality time with my family although it would not be easy to balance between work and life.
But reality is that you cannot get everything.
>> Did you mean: But in reality, you can\'t have everything.
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