Essay in my facvorite movie

2024-05-27 · 첨삭 강사 Ash

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My favorite movie is moana, because her outlooking is alike as me, for example, her curly hair and healthy face. Furthermore, I like the movie story that the little girl has exprienced the wonderful adventure with her friend. The movie was tought for me, value of friend, strongness of healty mind. So I like the movie.

강사 첨삭

Hi Gloria, 


Thanks for sharing your favorite movie. I like this movie too! I like the story and the songs especially “Your Welcome”. It’s an interesting song and I like it. 


-Teacher Ash


My favorite movie is moana, because her outlooking is alike as me, for example, her curly hair and healthy face.

>> My favorite movie is “Moana” because I look like her. For example, she has curly hair and a very healthy outlook in life.


Furthermore, I like the movie story that the little girl has exprienced the wonderful adventure with her friend. 

>> I also like how Moana experienced wonderful adventures with her friend. 


The movie was tought for me, value of friend, strongness of healty mind.

>> The movie taught me the value of friendship and having a healthy mindset. 


 So I like the movie.

>>That is why, I like the movie. 


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