ESSAY: In your own way, how do you try to help in waste reduction?

2019-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

Waste is a serious problem in the world today. According to the New Weeks, the total waste in 2016 was 2 billion tons and will be expected to surge to 3.4 billion tons by 2050. To reduce this increasing, many countries and organizations propose various solutions and ideas such as a recycling bin and separate collection. Personally, I do two things to participate in such effort. First, I usually bring my own tumbler. In the beginning, I bring it to keep my coffee in a warm condition. But, these days I use it not only for coffee but also for water and other drinks, which makes it possible for me to avoid using disposable one-time cups. Second, I try to escape impulsive buying. The stuff that I purchase without any plan frequently turns out useless in the near future and eventually becomes a waste. I think \"less buying, less wasting\".

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir Jong Moo. Thank you for this. As humans living in this planet, we do have a responsibility to take care of it. 
- T. Beth
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Waste is a serious problem in the world today.
>>> correct  
According to the New Weeks, the total waste in 2016 was 2 billion tons and will be expected to surge to 3.4 billion tons by 2050.
>>> correct   
To reduce this increasing, many countries and organizations propose various solutions and ideas such as a recycling bin and separate collection.
>>>  To reduce this from increasing, many countries and organizations propose various solutions and ideas such as a recycling bin and separate collection.
>>> OR: To reduce this increase, many countries and organizations propose various solutions and ideas such as a recycling bin and separate collection.    
Personally, I do two things to participate in such effort.
>>> correct   
First, I usually bring my own tumbler.
>>> correct   
In the beginning, I bring it to keep my coffee in a warm condition.
>>> correct
>>> OR: At first, I bring it to keep my coffee warm.    
But, these days I use it not only for coffee but also for water and other drinks, which makes it possible for me to avoid using disposable one-time cups.
>>>  correct  
Second, I try to escape impulsive buying.
>>>  correct
>>> OR: Second, I try to avoid impulsive buying.  
The stuff that I purchase without any plan frequently turns out useless in the near future and eventually becomes a waste.
>>> correct   
I think \"less buying, less wasting\".
>>> correct   

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