Essay (Jan 20th, 2022)
학생이 쓴 원문
What are the three most important things for you to be happy?
>>>First and the foremost one is my health condition. If my health were in a critical situation, I couldn’t anything. Only if I am in a good condition both physically and psychologically, can I do anything.
Second, Hope. Hope is what enables me to concentrate on the present and to have the assurance that I can handle the future as I want it to be. My life consists of three part : the past, the present and the future. Time goes forward, not backward. No exception. I cannot go back to even one second ago. I try to learn from the past and forget it, whether it is good or bad, as soon as possible. And I try to soak myself totally in the present and expect that tomorrow will be better than today with HOPE.
Lastly, Money. With money, I can do whatever I want
강사 첨삭
Good Evening, U [이름]!
Those things are really essential for us to live happily and peacefully. That is a good choice!
Thank you for sharing!
~T. Roanne ^_^
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First and the foremost one is my health condition.
>> The first and the foremost one is my health condition.
If my health were in a critical situation, I couldn’t anything.
>> Correct!
Only if I am in a good condition both physically and psychologically, can I do anything.
>> Only if I am in a good condition both physically and psychologically, I can do anything.
Second, Hope.
>> Only if I am in a good condition both physically and psychologically, I can do anything.
Second, Hope.
>> Correct! Or The second one, Hope.
Hope is what enables me to concentrate on the present and to have the assurance that I can handle the future as I want it to be.
>> Correct!
My life consists of three part : the past, the present and the future.
>> My life consists of three parts: the past, the present and the future.
Time goes forward, not backward. No exception.
>> Correct!
I cannot go back to even one second ago.
>> Correct!
I try to learn from the past and forget it, whether it is good or bad, as soon as possible.
>> Correct!
And I try to soak myself totally in the present and expect that tomorrow will be better than today with HOPE.
>> Correct!
Lastly, Money. With money, I can do whatever I want.
>> Correct!
Lastly, Money. With money, I can do whatever I want.
>> Correct!
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