Essay: live in a house or an apartment
학생이 쓴 원문
Thirdly, you should devote most of your free time to fixing and taking care of your house. Lastly, my wife and daughter still like to live in a city. Due to these practical reasons, I might end up with living in an apartment even after I retire. I believe most of men prefer to live in a house after they retire, but the reality they are facing does not allow them to live in a house. Korean people are used to living in apartments because it is much convenient, safe, clean, and better to educate their children.
강사 첨삭
Hi there again^^
Yes, I think, when it comes to education urban area has some advantage.
But anyway, see you later^^
~T.Nina
Thirdly, you should devote most of your free time to fixing and taking care of your house.
>> Third, you should devote most of your free time in fixing and taking care of your house.
Lastly, my wife and daughter still like to live in a city.
>> Finally, my wife and daughter still like to live in the city.
Due to these practical reasons, I might end up with living in an apartment even after I retire.
>> Due to these practical reasons, I might end up living in an apartment even after my retirement.
I believe most of men prefer to live in a house after they retire, but the reality they are facing does not allow them to live in a house.
>> I believe most men prefer to live in a house after they retire but the reality is that they can\'t.
Korean people are used to living in apartments because it is much convenient, safe, clean, and better to educate their children.
>> Korean people are used to live in apartments because it is very convenient, safe, clean, and it is better for the education of their children.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.