ESSAY: Please explain, \"In the end, we will remember not the words of our enemies, but the silence

2020-02-14 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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Martin was activist that fight for civil right and racism. so we must understand what he done, what it happen 60\'s in America it was totally chaos that conflict from racism and war everywhere cause fight each other that split black and white people don\'t want to fight anymore, because they are really sick of this problem and furthermore affected zeitgeist. nevertheless normal citizen keep their life quietly. the reason is they don\'t want to be damaged to everything. they just want to live normal like other people. So if I scream for unfairness or inequality, I also my family or my neighbor will target by their hate so what can they do? they couldn\'t see that situation And martin might knew that atmosphere and maybe he as well knew than anybody. but also he knew if we keep silence, we have to lose it all what we have Right So he decided move on, even though situation hard to scream In the end, we know it\'s more painful seeing miserable appearance behind than bothering by words

강사 첨삭

Good composition today, [이름] [이름].

Today is pretty long as well.

Thank you for doing your homework. Impressive work!

Keep it up!

~Teacher Eve.

Martin was activist that fight for civil right and racism.

>> Martin Luther was an activist who fought for civil rights and against racism.
 so we must understand what he done, what it happen

>> So we must understand what he\'s done and what happened.
 60\'s in America it was totally chaos that conflict from racism and war

>> 60\'s in America was a total chaos with conflicts from racism and war.
 everywhere cause fight each other that split black and white

>> There was fight everywhere that split black and white.
 people don\'t want to fight anymore, because they are really sick of this problem and furthermore affected zeitgeist.

>> People didn\'t want to fight anymore, because they were sick of this problem, furthermore, it affected the zeitgeist.
 nevertheless normal citizen keep their life quietly. 

>>Nevertheless, normal citizens kept their life quietly.
 the reason is they don\'t want to be damaged to everything. 

>> The reason is they didn\'t want to damage everything.
 they just want to live normal like other people.

>> They just want to live a normal life like other people.
 So if I scream for unfairness or inequality, I also my family or my neighbor will target by their hate

>> So if I scream about unfairness or inequality, my family or my neighbors will be targeted by their hatred.
 so what can they do? they couldn\'t see that situation

>> So what can they do? They don\'t see those kinds of situations.
 And martin might knew that atmosphere and maybe he as well knew than anybody. 

>> And Martin might know about that atmosphere as well as everybody.
 but also he knew if we keep silence, we have to lose it all what we have Right

>> But he also know that if we continue to be silent, we might lose our rights.
 So he decided move on, even though situation hard to scream

>> So he decided to move on, even though in his situation it was hard to scream.
 In the end, we know it\'s more painful seeing miserable appearance behind than bothering by words

>> In the end, we know that it\'s more painful to see miserable appearances then being bothered by words.

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