Essay prompt : Though texting is a valuable way of communicating, some people spend too much time se

2013-09-23 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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In the modern society, texting has been an important institution to communicate. It has been performing an effective role in recent days that requires a rapid communication. However, people have been spending too much time on sending messages by phones. In addition, they have been communicating with others by texting instead of interacting with others face to face. Texting, instead of interacting face to face can be a beneficial efficient institution to communicate though it can be a limited institution to communicate. Sending messages by phones instead of interacting with others face to face can be a limited institution to communicate because of limited expressing emotions. People can't be capable to well express their feelings and emotions. Rather, it can lead to a relation problem among people. On the other hand, interacting with others by meeting face to face can enhance the relationship among people. It can also be an institution to express one's feelings and emotions well because of using verbal and non-verbal emotions. As a result, people can improve relationships and have balanced lives. Texting can be a beneficial institution, but can be an instrument to put a distance among others. So people shouldn't spend too much time on texting.

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In the modern society, texting has been an important institution to communicate.

>> In  modern society, \"texting\" has been an important method/mode of communication.

It has been performing an effective role in recent days that requires a rapid communication.

>> It has been performing an effective role in recent days that requires rapid communication.

However, people have been spending too much time on sending messages by phones.

>>Correct!^^

In addition, they have been communicating with others by texting instead of interacting with others face to face.

>> In addition, they have been communicating with others by texting instead of interacting face to face.

Texting, instead of interacting face to face can be a beneficial efficient institution to communicate though it can be a limited institution to communicate.

>> Texting, instead of interacting face to face can be a beneficial and efficient tool to communicate though it has limitations.

Sending messages by phones instead of interacting with others face to face can be a limited institution to communicate because of limited expressing emotions.

>> Sending messages by phones instead of interacting with others face to face can be a limited tool to communicate because of its limitations when expressing emotions.

People can\'t be capable to well express their feelings and emotions.

>> People are no longer capable of expressing their feelings and emotions well.

Rather, it can lead to a relation problem among people.

>>Correct!^^

On the other hand, interacting with others by meeting face to face can enhance the relationship among people.

>>Correct!^^

It can also be an institution to express one\'s feelings and emotions well because of using verbal and non-verbal emotions.

>> It can also be an institution to express one\'s feelings and emotions well with the use of verbal and non-verbal communications.

As a result, people can improve relationships and have balanced lives.

>>Correct!

Texting can be a beneficial institution, but can be an instrument to put a distance among others.

>>Texting can be a beneficial institution, but can be an instrument to put  distance among others.

So people shouldn\'t spend too much time on texting.

>> So people shouldn\'t spend too much time texting.^^

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