ESSAY: Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think i

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The issue about modern technology\'s social trait would be a huge controversial topic and can cause heated debate amongst people who hold strong views on this issue.

>>> The issue about modern technology\'s social effect is a huge controversial topic and can cause heated debates amongst people who hold strong views on this issue.
I completely believe that modern technology help ordinary people sociable.
>>> I completely believe that modern technology help ordinary people become sociable. 
 Some people argue that building relationship through modern technology such as smartphone and social media service makes people less sociable.
>>>  Some people argue that building relationships through modern technology, such as smartphone and social media devices, makes people less sociable.
Because people who establish online relation pursue a superficial relationship and do not treat each other sincerely.
>>> Because people who establish online relationship may pursue a superficial connection and lack of sincerely.
 However, some people argue that using modern technology is much more simple way than dating in person to make friends.
>>>  However, some people argue that using modern technology is much simpler than dating other people just to make friends.
In other words, modern technology help modern people who are busy working can be sociality.
>>> In other words, modern technology help modern people who are busy working become more sociable.
By sharing daily life each other, general population get a sense of fulfillment easily.
>>> By sharing their daily life with each other, the majority can easily get a sense of fulfillment.
For instance, it takes only 5 minutes to make a friend through the internet.
>>> For instance, it may take only 5 minutes to make friends on the internet.
Because of that, people are likely to make lots of friends without spending money and time.
>>> Because of that, people are likely to make a lot of friends without spending so much money and time.