Essay: the importance of early childhood
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I agree with the point that the early childhood years are very important years of a person’s life. Although a baby at that age cannot talk, his/her brain and biological development during the first years of life is highly influenced by an infants’ environment. Early experiences determine health, education and economic participation for the rest of life. Many challenges faced by adults, such as mental health issues, obesity, heart disease, criminality, and poor literacy and numeracy, can be traced back to early childhood. Adequate stimulation and nutrition are essential for development during the first 12 months of life. It is during these years that a child's brain is most sensitive to the influences of the external environment. Rapid brain development affects cognitive, social and emotional growth. Such development helps to ensure that each child reaches his or her potential and is a productive part of a rapidly changing global society.
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Good afternoon Sir [이름]^^
How are you? I hope that you are doing fine and that you were able to have enough rest last night.
Your opinions are greatly appreciated. Keep up the good work!
Please tell me about your childhood experiences in class. See you! Take Care!
Teacher Nina
I agree with the point that the early childhood years are very important years of a person’s life.
>> I agree with the point that early childhood years are the very important years of a person\'s life.
Although a baby at that age cannot talk, his/her brain and biological development during the first years of life is highly influenced by an infants’ environment.
>> Although a baby at that age cannot talk, his/her brain and biological development during the first years of life is highly influenced by the infant\'s environment.
>> OR: Although at that age, the baby can\'t talk but his/her environment has an important role toward his/her development.
Early experiences determine health, education and economic participation for the rest of life.
>> Early experiences determine health, education and economic participation for the rest of a person\'s life.
Many challenges faced by adults, such as mental health issues, obesity, heart disease, criminality, and poor literacy and numeracy, can be traced back to early childhood.
>> Many challenges are faced by adults, such as mental health issues, obesity, heart disease, crimes, and poor literacy and numeracy can be traced back to their early childhood years.
Adequate stimulation and nutrition are essential for development during the first 12 months of life.
>> Correct!
It is during these years that a child\'s brain is most sensitive to the influences of the external environment.
>> Correct!
Rapid brain development affects cognitive, social and emotional growth.
>> Correct!
Such development helps to ensure that each child reaches his or her potential and is a productive part of a rapidly changing global society.
>> Those developmental stages helps to ensure that each child reaches his or her potential and have a productive part of the rapid changing global society.
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