Essay: Those who love pets

2013-11-22 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Most of people who raise animals as their pets have a close relationship with them and treat them as members of their family.I think it’s good for them to have such relationship with their pets. If you raise and spend time with your pet, I believe that it would become quite natural that the intimate and strong relationship between you and your pet will be built regardless of your intent and you will regard it as a member of your family. Many people who have pets spend even more money to check its health regularily and treat any disease it has than to spend for themselves. Some pet owners are willing to spend huge amount of money for its funeral. The funeral and a tomb are just the same as those for man. I do not want to blame people for the way they treat or think of their pets as long as it does not harm our society. However, I just hope that they also share their love, energy and wealth with underprivileged people around them. There are so many people who are starving to death.

강사 첨삭

\"I love those who can smile in trouble, who can gather strength from distress, and grow brave by reflection. \'Tis the business of little minds to shrink, but they whose heart is firm, and whose conscience approves their conduct, will pursue their principles unto death.\" Happy, happy Friday! Yes, it\'s Friday once again.  Thank you so much for sending in your essay. You expressed your ideas really well. I am amazed with it.^^Anyway, you owe me a story how you\'ll spend your weekend, alright? Rock \'n roll and see you later!~T. Nina^^ Most of people who raise animals as their pets have a close relationship with them and treat them as members of their family. >> Most people who raise animals as their pets have a close relationship with them and treat them as members of their family. I think it’s good for them to have such relationship with their pets. >> Correct If you raise and spend time with your pet, I believe that it would become quite natural that the intimate and strong relationship between you and your pet will be built regardless of your intent and you will regard it as a member of your family. >> Correct Many people who have pets spend even more money to check its health regularily and treat any disease it has than to spend for themselves. >> Many people who have pets spend even more money to check their pets\' health regularly and treat any diseases these pets have than  they spend for themselves. Some pet owners are willing to spend huge amount of money for its funeral. >> Correct The funeral and a tomb are just the same as those for man. >> The funeral and tomb are just the same as those for men. I do not want to blame people for the way they treat or think of their pets as long as it does not harm our society. >> Correct However, I just hope that they also share their love, energy and wealth with underprivileged people around them. >> Correct There are so many people who are starving to death. >> Correct

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