Essay: TOEIC QUESTION 11
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Some people prefer to take a job that does not pay well but does provide a lot of time off from work. What is your opinion about taking a low job with a low salary that has a lot of vacation time? Give reasons for your opinion.
I prefer to take a job with a low salary that has a lot of vacation time as well.
Most of all, even though I earn a lot of salary, if not I can spend my money for my life, it is meaningless.
In my case, I used to get a higher salary than my peers until last year.
However, I couldn\'t have a time to hang out and to have an enough vacation to that I was so exhausted.
In the end, I quit the job and I get a job with a lower salary.
I am satisfying with my life nowadays and the stress has been relieved because I\'m able to have a time with my friends every weekend.
Therefore, I think that a lower salary job is better.
강사 첨삭
Hi Bo [이름],
Thanks for the great response to your homework:) I guess I would the same if I were you. ^ ^
-Rachel
I prefer to take a job with a low salary that has a lot of vacation time as well.
>> correct
>> I prefer taking a job with a low salary but provides a lot of vacation time.
Most of all, even though I earn a lot of salary, if not I can spend my money for my life, it is meaningless.
Most of all, even though I earn a lot of salary, if not I can spend my money for my life, it is meaningless.
>> Generally, even though I earn a lot of money, if I can\'t spend it, then life is meaningless.
In my case, I used to get a higher salary than my peers until last year.
In my case, I used to get a higher salary than my peers until last year.
>> correct (awesome)
However, I couldn\'t have a time to hang out and to have an enough vacation to that I was so exhausted.
However, I couldn\'t have a time to hang out and to have an enough vacation to that I was so exhausted.
>> However, I couldn\'t find the time to hang out with my friends and have enough vacation to the point that I became exhausted.
In the end, I quit the job and I get a job with a lower salary.
In the end, I quit the job and I get a job with a lower salary.
>> In the end, I quit my job and found one with a lower salary.
I am satisfying with my life nowadays and the stress has been relieved because I\'m able to have a time with my friends every weekend.
I am satisfying with my life nowadays and the stress has been relieved because I\'m able to have a time with my friends every weekend.
>> I am satisfied with my life nowadays and I am no longer stressed because I\'m able to have a time with my friends every weekend.
Therefore, I think that a lower salary job is better.
Therefore, I think that a lower salary job is better.
>> correct
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