ESSAY: What are the changes in your city/town between now and 10 years ago? Detailed description ple

Thank you Kelly!  You are using different patterns in your practices. I commend you for that! ^_^

~ T. Irene ~

These days, due to industry development, my hometown has been changing much more convenient than the 10 years ago.

>>> These days, due to industrial development, my hometown has changed a lot such that it became more  convenient to live here than the 10 years ago.

This essay will examine how the city changed in particular field.
>>> This essay will examine how a particular city has changed and in what ways did it change.
There are a variety of alternations in seoul, the capital of Korea.

>>> There are already a variety of changes in and around Seoul, the capital of Korea.

The first change is increased a public transportation.

>>> The first change is the increase of public transport systems.

Due to rising population in seoul and also considering environment factor, the government had been creating a nice transport system.

>>> Due to the rising population in Seoul and also in consideration of the environment, the government has been continuously developing the city\'s transport system.

 After so many struggles and difficulties along the way, people are able to take convenient public transportation.

>>>  After so many struggles and difficulties along the way, people are now able to conveniently use the public transportation.

 Because ordinary people can get a lot of benefits to use transportation such as morning discount, tax refund, and even transfer between subway and bus, many general population commute and go to school by subway and bus.

>>>  Nowadays, even ordinary citizens can enjoy a lot of benefits such as morning discounts, tax refunds, and even transfers between subways or buses. The general population commute. Some go to school or work by subway and/or bus.