ESSAY: What do you think \"beauty is skin deep\" means?
학생이 쓴 원문
now days, people just chasing beauty of appearance
Beauty is good thing. this is so-called “gift of GOD”
But in the present, In my opinion,
The problem is beauty combined with capitalism.
Beauty market is huge blue ocean
So Marketing always have been talking about beauty
Because beauty make earned a lot of money
they praise and follow the beauty like a sheep
mass media control to us like more beauty than yesterday!
and i would be but almost of all is a fake like a rainbow
despite this prevail problem, we just believe those advertise and purchase stuff furthermore, some people decide plastic surgery that reason why just their face don\'t like
in fact, we can\'t be like a model or actor and we can\'t be same person
beauty is not meaning just about appearance.
beauty mean about charm and charm comes from different personality
Originally we attracted what we\'ve never been experienced
we have to focus about each own personality
if so we can more beauty!
강사 첨삭
That is true, [이름] [이름].
I can see it here in my country as well, but plastic surgery is still a taboo.
Thank you for this compositions!
~Teacher Eve.
now days, people just chasing beauty of appearance
>> Nowadays, people are just chasing the appearance of beauty.
Beauty is good thing. this is so-called “gift of GOD”
>> Beauty is a good thing, it is so called the \"gift of GOD\".
But in the present, In my opinion, The problem is beauty combined with capitalism.
>> But in our present time, in my opinion, the problem is how beauty is combined with capitalism.
Beauty market is huge blue ocean
>> THe beauty market is a huge blue ocean.
So Marketing always have been talking about beauty
>> So marketing always talks about beauty.
Because beauty make earned a lot of money they praise and follow the beauty like a sheep
>> Because the beauty industry earn a lot of money, they get praised and followed like a sheep.
mass media control to us like more beauty than yesterday!
>> Mass media controls us to like beauty more than yesterday!
and i would be but almost of all is a fake like a rainbow
>> And I would be but almost all of it is fake like a rainbow.
despite this prevail problem, we just believe those advertise and purchase stuff furthermore,
>> Despite this problem, we just believe those advertisements and purchase more stuff.
some people decide plastic surgery that reason why just their face don\'t like
>> Some people decide that plastic surgery is the reason why they don\'t like their faces.
in fact, we can\'t be like a model or actor and we can\'t be same person
>> In fact, we can\'t be a model or an actor and be the same person.
beauty is not meaning just about appearance.
>> Beauty is not just about the appearance.
beauty mean about charm and charm comes from different personality
>> Beauty is meant more about charm and charm comes from different personality.
Originally we attracted what we\'ve never been experienced
>> Originally, we attract what we\'ve never experienced.
we have to focus about each own personality
>> We have to focus on our own personality.
if so we can more beauty!
>> If so, we can be more beautiful.
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