ESSAY: What do you think might happen to America if these social issues they have will be delt indiv
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I believe they have a lot of issues but they have been trying to handle the problems. In my experience, their issues are racism, gaps between generations, discrimination, divorce, abortion, drugs, and active shooter crimes. It looks like U.S. is a country of crime, but actually these are very common issues that the entire world has. Even my country has a lot of issues like them except for fire arms. Some bad point of views to the Americans come from attention to the U.S. since they are the strongest leading country in the world. Anyway, Solving these problems takes a lot of time but they already know how these issues are serious and eager to fix them. And I believe they are changing now. For example, most of American people around me were very polite and so careful when they treat people from other cultures. So once again, I think they already have been changing their problems, it takes time to resolve but eventually they will fix them.
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What do you think might happen to America if these social issues they have will be dealt individually?
I believe they have a lot of issues but they have been trying to handle the problems.
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In my experience, their issues are racism, gaps between generations, discrimination, divorce, abortion, drugs, and active shooter crimes.
>>> In my experience, their issues are racism, generations gaps, discrimination, divorce, abortion, drugs, and massive shooting crimes.
It looks like U.S. is a country of crime, but actually these are very common issues that the entire world has.
>>> It may seem that the US is a country of crimes, but these are common issues that the entire world has.
OR: It may seem that the US is a country full of crimes, but these are common issues that also happens around the world.
Even my country has a lot of issues like them except for fire arms.
>>> Even my country has a lot of social issues like in America well except for loose firearms.
Some bad point of views to the Americans come from attention to the U.S. since they are the strongest leading country in the world.
>>> These bad things that happens in America is getting a lot of attention because they are the strongest leading country in the world.
Anyway, Solving these problems takes a lot of time but they already know how these issues are serious and eager to fix them.
>>> Anyway, solving these problems take a lot of time but they already know how serious these issues are and they are so eager to fix them.
And I believe they are changing now. For example, most of American people around me were very polite and so careful when they treat people from other cultures.
>>> And I believe they are changing now. For example, most of the Americans around me were very polite and so careful when they treat people from other countries.
So once again, I think they already have been changing their problems, it takes time to resolve but eventually they will fix them.
>>> So once again, I think they already have been trying to solve their problems, and it takes time to resolve them but eventually they will fix it.
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