Essay: What do you think of space tourism (traveling in space)?
학생이 쓴 원문
When I was young, I lived in a rural area.
At night, I often looked up at the sky.
There are a lot of stars including the North star, Big Dipper and Cassiopeia.
I also had a chance to visit an astronomical observatory, where I could watch the Saturn and its beautiful belt.
It was an amazing experience.
At that time, I hoped that I could travel in space someday.
Recently, space tourism is becoming a reality as technology enhances.
For instance, Elom Musk who leads Tesla announces space exploration plan, called SpaceX.
According to his plan, we can travel the Solar system and even the Galaxy.
I am exciting :-).
강사 첨삭
Hello Jong Moo. Thank you for this. Space tourism does sound interesting but i bet it would also cost a lot. In one article I read, a ticket to space would cost around $200, 000.
- T. Beth
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When I was young, I lived in a rural area.>>> correct
At night, I often looked up at the sky.
At night, I often looked up at the sky.
>>> correct
There are a lot of stars including the North star, Big Dipper and Cassiopeia.
There are a lot of stars including the North star, Big Dipper and Cassiopeia.
>>> correct
I also had a chance to visit an astronomical observatory, where I could watch the Saturn and its beautiful belt.
I also had a chance to visit an astronomical observatory, where I could watch the Saturn and its beautiful belt.
>>> correct
>>> OR: I also had the privilege to visit an astronomical observatory where I could watch Saturn and its beautiful belt.
It was an amazing experience.
>>> correct
At that time, I hoped that I could travel in space someday.
>>> correct
Recently, space tourism is becoming a reality as technology enhances.
At that time, I hoped that I could travel in space someday.
>>> correct
Recently, space tourism is becoming a reality as technology enhances.
>>> correct
For instance, Elom Musk who leads Tesla announces space exploration plan, called SpaceX.
For instance, Elom Musk who leads Tesla announces space exploration plan, called SpaceX.
>>> For instance, Elon Musk who leads Tesla has announced about a space exploration plan called SpaceX.
According to his plan, we can travel the Solar system and even the Galaxy.
>>> correct
I am exciting :-).
I am exciting :-).
>>> I am excited!
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