Essay: What do you value the most in life?
학생이 쓴 원문
This topic is the most difficult one I have ever got.
There are a lot of things that we value in our life.
We can give a high rank to abstract things such as love, peace, happiness and righteousness.
Sometimes we appreciate highly some concrete stuff including richness, achievement, position and commodities.
Well... I think, for me, the most important thing is people, specifically relationship with other people.
When I was a high school student, I studied hard to make my parents and teachers happy.
Theses days, in my company, I do my best to satisfy colleagues.
Sometimes, I am angry with other people because I want them to overcome their weak points and eventually to make them happy.
Considering other people prior to me and trying to make them happy in turn make me happy too.
강사 첨삭
Hello Jong Moo. Thank you for this. The things that actually give us genuine happiness are the simplest things money can\'t buy. That includes, yes, good relationship with others.
- T. Beth
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This topic is the most difficult one I have ever got.>>> This topic is the most difficult one I have ever gotten.
There are a lot of things that we value in our life.
>>> Correct.
>>> OR: There are a lot of things that we value in life.
We can give a high rank to abstract things such as love, peace, happiness and righteousness.
>>> Correct.
Sometimes we appreciate highly some concrete stuff including richness, achievement, position and commodities.
Sometimes we appreciate highly some concrete stuff including richness, achievement, position and commodities.
>>> Correct.
Well... I think, for me, the most important thing is people, specifically relationship with other people.
>>> Well, for me, I think the most important thing is people, specifically relationships with other people.
When I was a high school student, I studied hard to make my parents and teachers happy.
>>> Correct.
Theses days, in my company, I do my best to satisfy colleagues.
Theses days, in my company, I do my best to satisfy colleagues.
>>> Correct.
Sometimes, I am angry with other people because I want them to overcome their weak points and eventually to make them happy.
Sometimes, I am angry with other people because I want them to overcome their weak points and eventually to make them happy.
>>> Correct.
Considering other people prior to me and trying to make them happy in turn make me happy too.
Considering other people prior to me and trying to make them happy in turn make me happy too.
>>> Correct.
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