Essay: What is the greatest lesson you\'ve learned last year?

2020-01-27 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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It happened last May. The weather was hot even though it wasn\'t summer yet. I don\'t remember exactly why, but I was exhausted at that time. Probably it was because I had lots of things to do or I just felt spring fatigue which made me feel down, being melancholy. One day I was scheduled to have a counseling with a student. FYI, my school has a system that associates students with his/her adviser and makes it a rule to have a counseling regularly. We had ordinary conversations such as \"What is your favorite stuff?\" and \"What is your plan after graduation?\", but I didn\'t have any energy in this talk. Suddenly, the student asked \"what was your dream when you were young?\" I answered, \"Well, I want to be a teacher\". He remarked \"Wow, you make your dream. You are definitely happy now\". The remark hits me like a thunder and threw my fatigue away. Often we forget what is important to us especially when we\'re accustomed to it. \"Going back to basics\" is one of lessons I\'ve learned last year.

강사 첨삭

Wow! Amazing story!

Thank you so much for sharing, Mr. [이름]. 

I also learned a lesson by reading your composition today. 

I definitely agree with your last statement about going back to the basics. 

Keep up the great work!

I\'m looking forward to more compositions from you. :D

~Teacher Eve.    

It happened last May.

>> Correct!
 The weather was hot even though it wasn\'t summer yet. 

>> Correct!
I don\'t remember exactly why, but I was exhausted at that time.

>> Correct!
 Probably it was because I had lots of things to do or I just felt spring fatigue which made me feel down, being melancholy.

>>Probably it was because I had lots of things to do or I just felt a spring fatigue which made me feel down and melancholy.
 One day I was scheduled to have a counseling with a student.

>> Correct!
 FYI, my school has a system that associates students with his/her adviser and makes it a rule to have a counseling regularly.

>> Correct!
 We had ordinary conversations such as \"What is your favorite stuff?\" and \"What is your plan after graduation?\",

>>  We had an ordinary conversations such as \"What is your favorite stuff?\" and \"What is your plan after graduation?\"
 but I didn\'t have any energy in this talk.

>> But I didn\'t have any energy during this talk.
 Suddenly, the student asked \"what was your dream when you were young?\"

>> Correct!
 I answered, \"Well, I want to be a teacher\".

>> Correct!
 He remarked \"Wow, you make your dream. You are definitely happy now\".

>> He remarked \"Wow, you\'ve achieved your dream. You are definitely happy now\".
 The remark hits me like a thunder and threw my fatigue away.

>>  That remark hits me like a thunder and threw my fatigue away.
 Often we forget what is important to us especially when we\'re accustomed to it. 

>> Correct!
 \"Going back to basics\" is one of lessons I\'ve learned last year.

>> Correct!

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