Essay: What is your opinion about fasting?

2020-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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People do fasting for various purposes. Some people do it due to the religious reason. Lent for Catholics and Ramadan for Muslims are typical example of this type of fasting. Another type of fasting is for dieting. The famous 16:8 diet is a time-restrict intermittent fasting where we eat during the 8 hours and avoid food during the remaining 16 hours each day. Some persons go further and think that fasting is good not only for diet but also for rehabilitation. The article I read during the class shows that fasting diet regenerates some pancreas cells that are no longer functioning. I also do the intermittent fasting mainly for losing my weight. Sometimes I feel that fasting refreshes not only my body but also my mind. But, note that fasting for long periods is bad since it might decreases the essential nutrients such as vitamins and minerals in our body.

강사 첨삭

HAPPY MONDAY! Great composition today. Your English grammar looks great!
~Teacher Eve.
People do fasting for various purposes.
>> Correct!
Some people do it due to the religious reason.
>> Some people do it due to Religious reasons.
Lent for Catholics and Ramadan for Muslims are typical example of this type of fasting.
>> Lent for Catholics and Ramadan for Muslims are typical examples of this type of fasting.
Another type of fasting is for dieting.
>> Correct!
The famous 16:8 diet is a time-restrict intermittent fasting where we eat during the 8 hours and avoid food during the remaining 16 hours each day.
>> The famous 16:8 diet is a time-restrict intermittent fasting where we eat for 8 hours and avoid food for the remaining 16 hours each day.
Some persons go further and think that fasting is good not only for diet but also for rehabilitation.
>> Some people go further as to to think that fasting is good not only for dieting but also for rehabilitation.
The article I read during the class shows that fasting diet regenerates some pancreas cells that are no longer functioning.
>> Correct!
I also do the intermittent fasting mainly for losing my weight.
>> Correct!
Sometimes I feel that fasting refreshes not only my body but also my mind.
>> Correct!
But, note that fasting for long periods is bad since it might decreases the essential nutrients such as vitamins and minerals in our body.
>> But, note that fasting for a long period of time is bad since it might decrease the essential nutrients such as vitamins and minerals in our body.

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