Essay: What should a government do for a country to become successful?
학생이 쓴 원문
Let’s talk about the Korean government. The biggest problem Korea is facing today is the sluggish economy, especially the domestic economy since the export business is relatively in good shape. The government and private research firms predict that Korea’s annual growth rate would range from 2.5% to 2.7% this year, which is about 0.3% down from the previous forecast. The few reasons of the slowdown are freezed housing market, appreciated Korean currency, low employment rate, and no investment by private businesses.
In order to boost the economy, the government should put money into the market by implementing monetary expansion policies such as lowering the discount rate and bank reserve ration. Above all, the government has to focus on reforming the current economic environment that should include deregulation, free trade agreement with other countries, and the greater use of women and elderly folk in an ageing workforce.
강사 첨삭
Hi there again SIR [이름]^^
What a brilliant ideas! Wow! You were able to use a lot of vocabulary words to express your thoughts. You were able to convey your thoughts well. Wonderful job! Yes you are right the government should focus on reforming the current economy. A lot of people will be really happy about that.Anyway,let\'s talk more about this in class.See you later!
Teacher Nina
Let’s talk about the Korean government.
>> Let\'s talk about the Korean government.
The biggest problem Korea is facing today is the sluggish economy, especially the domestic economy since the export business is relatively in good shape.
>> The biggest problem Korea is facing today is the sluggish economy especially domestic,since the export business is relatively in a good shape.
The government and private research firms predict that Korea’s annual growth rate would range from 2.5% to 2.7% this year, which is about 0.3% down from the previous forecast.
>> Correct!
The few reasons of the slowdown are freezed housing market, appreciated Korean currency, low employment rate, and no investment by private businesses.
>> Few reasons of the slowdown are freezed housing market, appreciated Korean currency, low employment rate, and no investment by private businesses. In order to boost the economy, the government should put money into the market by implementing monetary expansion policies such as lowering the discount rate and bank reserve ration.
>> In order to boost the economy, the government should put money into the market by implementing monetary expansion policies such as lowering the discount rate and bank reservevation.
Above all, the government has to focus on reforming the current economic environment that should include deregulation, free trade agreement with other countries, and the greater use of women and elderly folk in an ageing workforce.
>> Above all, the government has to focus on reforming the current environment of the economy that includes deregulation, free trade agreement with other countries, and the greater use of women and elderly folk in an aging workforce.
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