Essay: What would you choose to represent your country at an international exhibition?

2013-11-15 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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If I were asked to send one thing representing Korea to an international exhibition, I would choose Hanbok that is the traditional Korean dress. There are many items that represent the Korean culture or the unique Korean styles. They are potteries, wood masks that are used for the traditional Korean outdoor performance, Kimchi, straw shoes, etc. Among them, Hanbok is the best item to be displayed at the international exhibition. Hanbok It is often characterized by vibrant colors and simple lines without pockets. Although the term literally means "Korean clothing", Hanbok today often refers specifically to Hanbok of Choson Dynasty and is worn as semi-formal or formal wear during traditional festivals and celebrations. Throughout history, Korea had a dual clothing tradition, in which rulers and aristocrats adopted different kinds of mixed foreign-influenced indigenous styles, while the commoners continued to use a distinct style of indigenous clothing that today is known as Hanbok.

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If I were asked to send one thing representing Korea to an international exhibition, I would choose Hanbok that is the traditional Korean dress.

>>If I were asked to send one thing to represent Korean in an international exhibition, I would choose Hanbok, which is the traditional Korean dress.

There are many items that represent the Korean culture or the unique Korean styles.

>>There are a lot of things that can represent Korean culture or the unique Korean style.

They are potteries, wood masks that are used for the traditional Korean outdoor performance, Kimchi, straw shoes, etc.

>>correct^^

Among them, Hanbok is the best item to be displayed at the international exhibition.

>>Among them, Hanbok is the best item to be displayed in the international exhibition.

Hanbok It is often characterized by vibrant colors and simple lines without pockets.

>>Hanbok is often characterized with vibrant colors and simple lines without pocket.

Although the term literally means \"Korean clothing\".

>>correct^^

Hanbok today often refers specifically to Hanbok of Choson Dynasty and is worn as semi-formal or formal wear during traditional festivals and celebrations.

>>However, nowadays, Hanbok refers specifically to Hanbok of Choson Dynasty and is worn as a semi-formal or formal wear during traditional festival/s and celebrations.

Throughout history, Korea had a dual clothing tradition, in which rulers and aristocrats adopted different kinds of mixed foreign-influenced indigenous styles, while the commoners continued to use a distinct style of indigenous clothing that today is known as Hanbok.

>>CORRECT^^

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