ESSAY: Why do you think \"New Year\" is important?

2020-01-22 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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I think new year is becoming the standard to index of our life, each every year. when I was a child, my mother checks my tall at the door next to the wall on annual. It was look likes a weird annual ring of tree and That ring was keeping stacked up until I go to school. How much grow up am i? The new year means was growth when I was a little boy. How much grow up am i? when I threw a question again as i grown up it was changing the meaning. I still throw a question to already grown me and that question turned out regret to me immediately Now I don\\\'t need anymore to check my weird annual ring at my old house instead when I see the mirror I can read my wrinkle in my face. but don\\\'t be sad, we are not just getting older, we making a experience of ring. and someday, we figure out when we look back to our ring, How much we are came in my life P.S sadly my desktop PC monitor got error, i hope fix it but if i can\'t fix it until start our class, i can\'t see the book.... I am sorry....:O

강사 첨삭

You have wrinkles already?

I\'m surprised!

And don\'t worry, you can take as much time as you want to have your PC fixed. 

We can have free talking in our class if that is the case. :D

See you!

~Teacher Eve.    

I think new year is becoming the standard to index of our life, each every year.

>> I think the \"New Year\" is becoming a standard index of our life every year.
 when I was a child, my mother checks my tall at the door next to the wall on annual.

>> When I was a child, my mother checks my height at the door next to the wall annually.
 It was look likes a weird annual ring of tree and That ring was keeping stacked up until I go to school.

>> It looks like a weird annual ring of a tree and that ring keeps stacking up until I go to school.
 How much grow up am i?

>> How much did I grow?
 The new year means was growth when I was a little boy.

>> The \"New Year\" means growth when I was a little boy.
 How much grow up am i?

>> How much did I grow?
 when I threw a question again as i grown up

>> When I threw that question again as I grow up.
 it was changing the meaning.

>> It changes the meaning.
 I still throw a question to already grown me and that question turned out regret to me immediately

>> I still that that question to a grown up version of myself and I regretted it immediately.
 Now I don\\\'t need anymore to check my weird annual ring at my old house

>> Now, I don\'t need to check my weird annual ring at my old house.
 instead when I see the mirror I can read my wrinkle in my face.

>> Instead, when I see the mirror I can see wrinkles on my face.
 but don\\\'t be sad, we are not just getting older, we making a experience of ring.

>> But don\'t be sad, we are not getting older, we are just having an experience of ring.
 and someday, we figure out when we look back to our ring, How much we are came in my life

>> And someday, we will figure out, when we look back to our rings, how much we\'ve come in our life.

 P.S
sadly my desktop PC monitor got error, i hope fix it

>> Sadly my desktop PC monitor got an error. I hope it gets fixed.
 but if i can\'t fix it until start our class, i can\'t see the book....

>> But if I can\'t fix it until the start of our class, I won\'t be able to see the book.
 I am sorry....:O

>>Correct!

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