ESSAY: Would you travel to places alone that are known to be dangerous? Do you think the media makes
학생이 쓴 원문
Thesedays, Many people travel other countries alone to improve their ability. However, I usually prefer to go with friends in safe place.
Anyway, some people argue that the media shows special places much more dangerous than real even though the places are really safe in fact. When it comes to media, I\'m not so trendy. However, I strongly believe that media has been appeared facts and we could believe the news.
The first reason is that I strongly believe that the reporters who work in broadcasting company have duty. Besides that, people who read news are not fool, so they distinguish fault and fact. Sometimes the new is also likely to show fault. Therefore, considering the information is right or not is essential for people who read news.
In my opinion, we should have to not only believe their opinions, but also doubt their views. It is the way to survive from lots of information
강사 첨삭
Thanks Kelly for your composition! ^_^ Keep it up! Try to use the words you are familiar with. You don\'t have time to memorize new words for now.
~Teacher Irene~
These days, Many people travel other countries alone to improve their ability.
>>> These days, many people travel to other countries alone to improve or learn new things.
However, I usually prefer to go with friends in safe place.
>>> However, I usually prefer to go with friends in safe places.
Anyway, some people argue that the media shows special places much more dangerous than real even though the places are really safe in fact.
>>> Anyway, some people argue that the media make some places sound more dangerous than they really are even when the fact of the matter is, these places are actually safe for traveling.
When it comes to media, I\'m not so trendy.
>>> Correct.
>>> When it comes to media, I\'m not so interested.
However, I strongly believe that media has been appeared facts and we could believe the news.
>>> However, I strongly believe that media can give us facts that are trustworthy.
The first reason is that I strongly believe that the reporters who work in broadcasting company have duty.
>>> My first reason for believing so is that I strongly believe that reporters who work in broadcasting companies have a duty to uphold the truth.
Besides that, people who read news are not fool, so they distinguish fault and fact.
>>> Another reason is that people cannot be fooled. They can distinguish facts and false news.
Sometimes the new is also likely to show fault.
>>> Sometimes it\'s can be obvious that the news is not true.
Therefore, considering the information is right or not is essential for people who read news.
>>> Therefore, whether the information is right or not is essential for those who read the news.
In my opinion, we should have to not only believe their opinions, but also doubt their views.
>>> In my opinion, we should not immediately believe their opinions, but also give a measure of doubt regarding their views.
It is the way to survive from lots of information
>>> It is the way to sort out all these information.
~Teacher Irene~
These days, Many people travel other countries alone to improve their ability.
>>> These days, many people travel to other countries alone to improve or learn new things.
However, I usually prefer to go with friends in safe place.
>>> However, I usually prefer to go with friends in safe places.
Anyway, some people argue that the media shows special places much more dangerous than real even though the places are really safe in fact.
>>> Anyway, some people argue that the media make some places sound more dangerous than they really are even when the fact of the matter is, these places are actually safe for traveling.
When it comes to media, I\'m not so trendy.
>>> Correct.
>>> When it comes to media, I\'m not so interested.
However, I strongly believe that media has been appeared facts and we could believe the news.
>>> However, I strongly believe that media can give us facts that are trustworthy.
The first reason is that I strongly believe that the reporters who work in broadcasting company have duty.
>>> My first reason for believing so is that I strongly believe that reporters who work in broadcasting companies have a duty to uphold the truth.
Besides that, people who read news are not fool, so they distinguish fault and fact.
>>> Another reason is that people cannot be fooled. They can distinguish facts and false news.
Sometimes the new is also likely to show fault.
>>> Sometimes it\'s can be obvious that the news is not true.
Therefore, considering the information is right or not is essential for people who read news.
>>> Therefore, whether the information is right or not is essential for those who read the news.
In my opinion, we should have to not only believe their opinions, but also doubt their views.
>>> In my opinion, we should not immediately believe their opinions, but also give a measure of doubt regarding their views.
It is the way to survive from lots of information
>>> It is the way to sort out all these information.
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