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2013-12-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I preper to plan schedule for my free time. but the schedule isn't planed precisely. I want to make a plan, when meet my friends or my girl friend. I usually don't make a plan. because I need a time to rest not a time to go travel or schduled plan. Of course, there are a lot of advantages for plan. ---- anyway.. I start to the story about my journey. 11.1.2 It was good news because lots of people who had been here couldn't see the top. the ticket was expensive. It costed about 160000(It can be used to our 2-month-class!). but the cost deserve it. the mountain with snowed top, and many woods in mountain, were Only can see in the pictures. it was fascinating. I talked to one of families who played in the mountain and asked that "When did you lean playing ski?". they said that they learned ski when they were four years old. It was amazing.I've been ski place, when I was 23 years old. They came to swiss to enjoy ski in every year. they bought a house for ski season.

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Thank you for sending in your homework today. I really appreciate it. Your experience is indeed amazing! Wish I could ski, too.KKK^^ Anyway, see you later. ~.T.Nina^^   I preper to plan schedule for my free time. but the schedule isn\'t planed precisely. >> I prefer planning my schedule during my free time though it is not precise.I want to make a plan, when meet my friends or my girl friend. > >I want to make a plan when meeting my friends or my girlfriend.I usually don\'t make a plan. because I need a time to rest not a time to go travel or schduled plan. >> I usually don\'t make a plan because I need time to rest and I don\'t have time to travel or to do any plans.Of course, there are a lot of advantages for plan. >> Of course, there are a lot of advantages of planning. >> OR: Of course, there are a lot of advantages when making a plan for your activities. ----anyway.. I start to the story about my journey.11.1.2 >> Anyway, I will start the story about my journey.It was good news because lots of people who had been here couldn\'t see the top. >> It was a good news for me because lots of people who had been here couldn\'t see the top.the ticket was expensive. It costed about 160000(It can be used to our 2-month-class!). but the cost deserve it. >> The ticket was expensive. It costs about 160000 which can be used for our 2-month class that makes me think the price\'s worth.the mountain with snowed top, and many woods in mountain, were Only can see in the pictures. it was fascinating. >> The mountain was full of snow on top, and it has many woods on it which is seen only in pictures. It was fascinating!I talked to one of families who played in the mountain and asked that \"When did you lean playing ski?\". >> Did you mean: I talked to one a person who played in the mountain and asked him/her, \"When did you learn playing ski?\" >> OR: I talked to a person who played in the mountain and asked him/her, When did you learn ski?\" they said that they learned ski when they were four years old. >> Correct (observe capitalization though) It was amazing. >>Correct I\'ve been ski place, when I was 23 years old. >> I\'d been in a ski area when I was 23 years old. They came to swiss to enjoy ski in every year. they bought a house for ski season. >>They came to Swiss to enjoy skiing every year. They bought a vacation house for the winter season where they can ski.

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